| "Cold Rain on a Cold Mountain" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Reviewed By: mangafreak7793 On: October 30, 2008 16:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
nice chapter keep it up
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Reviewed By: Vertigo900 On: April 17, 2005 16:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it! Can't wait till you update again! Your writing sytle is very interesting the way you describe all the violent parts is amazing. It's very enjoyable to read and I haven't seen a fic like this in awhile. I'll wait till your next update.
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Reviewed By: jin_hyungiex3 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2005 07:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like your style of writing. The way you use metaphores and such was really good. I've never seen anybody write as good as you. It must've taken a while to do it. Also, unlike all the other fanfictions I have read so far, yours didn't have a single mistake in grammer or spelling. I have to give you credit on just that, because it's kind of hard to understand the story when there's mistakes all over the place. I haven't been able to read all the episodes, but I really look forward to it. Keep up the good work :]
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Reviewed By: Rubel2 On: October 13, 2004 03:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked it. This is a very interesting retelling of the eva story and I am interested to see where it goes. It will go somewhere right?..... From reading it I get the feeling that there is something behind Shinji's oft repeating sense of deja-vu and I wonder what it might be? Oh well I'll just have to wait for the rest to find out.
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Reviewed By: mystlady (mbmflips@yahoo.com) On: September 03, 2004 23:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Damn, I love this story. Forget that bitch, Asuka or whatever her name is. This is just lovely piece of R/S shipping fic. I hope I get to read the bloody lemon. Hurry up with the freaking update. LOL.
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Reviewed By: Sauerbruch On: April 30, 2004 00:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alright the style doesn't exactly pull me along, but it is a very good story. Originality is probably due to the fact that I skip any story described as Asuka/Shinji, otherwise this only reminds me of one story (which I lost track of when SDAT went down). It strikes me that with the Tale of Two Cities thing it strikes me that one edition that I've seen has "It is far far better thing that I do now..." (can't remember the quote exactly) on the last page. This could have actually have been the first thing that Shinji read if he had opened it as if it were a Japanese book (though whether he would bother to translate it is another matter entirely). I agree about breaking up the paragraphs. I would also like to to see more chapters, this is easily sitting somewhere in the top 10% (better if I only consider new stories/authors).
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Reviewed By: Sauerbruch On: April 30, 2004 00:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alright the style doesn't exactly pull me along, but it is a very good story. Originality is probably due to the fact that I skip any story described as Asuka/Shinji, otherwise this only reminds me of one story (which I lost track of when SDAT went down). It strikes me that with the Tale of Two Cities thing it strikes me that one edition that I've seen has "It is far far better thing that I do now..." (can't remember the quote exactly) on the last page. This could have actually have been the first thing that Shinji read if he had opened it as if it were a Japanese book (though whether he would bother to translate it is another matter entirely). I agree about breaking up the paragraphs. I would also like to to see more chapters, this is easily sitting somewhere in the top 10% (better if I only consider new stories/authors).
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Reviewed By: Sauerbruch On: April 30, 2004 00:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alright the style doesn't exactly pull me along, but it is a very good story. Originality is probably due to the fact that I skip any story described as Asuka/Shinji, otherwise this only reminds me of one story (which I lost track of when SDAT went down). It strikes me that with the Tale of Two Cities thing it strikes me that one edition that I've seen has "It is far far better thing that I do now..." (can't remember the quote exactly) on the last page. This could have actually have been the first thing that Shinji read if he had opened it as if it were a Japanese book (though whether he would bother to translate it is another matter entirely). I agree about breaking up the paragraphs. I would also like to to see more chapters, this is easily sitting somewhere in the top 10% (better if I only consider new stories/authors).
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Reviewed By: Sauerbruch On: April 30, 2004 00:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alright the style doesn't exactly pull me along, but it is a very good story. Originality is probably due to the fact that I skip any story described as Asuka/Shinji, otherwise this only reminds me of one story (which I lost track of when SDAT went down). It strikes me that with the Tale of Two Cities thing it strikes me that one edition that I've seen has "It is far far better thing that I do now..." (can't remember the quote exactly) on the last page. This could have actually have been the first thing that Shinji read if he had opened it as if it were a Japanese book (though whether he would bother to translate it is another matter entirely). I agree about breaking up the paragraphs. I would also like to to see more chapters, this is easily sitting somewhere in the top 10% (better if I only consider new stories/authors).
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Reviewed By: somethingorother On: April 28, 2004 23:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hmm... I think you've got interesting ideas, but your biggest flaw is your style. You need to break up those HUGE paragraphs. Also, it would help to add some description to the end of dialogue tags. None of your dialogue has anything descriptive added to it, and while it's not abosultely necessary to have description after EVERY dialogue tag, a few here and there would help create a better image. Look forward to seeing more from you. ;)
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