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| "My Innocent Hikari" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Reviewed By: paniwi (NLI) On: April 28, 2005 02:39 CDT
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i say bakura, why? cuz Ryou and Bakura are my favorites, no more no less... it's a good poem
| Title: Wow, this took me a while to realize. ^^;
Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2004 08:07 CDT
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Ok, I was just rereading it and I realized that there is a fault in your writing. You change the number of lines per stanza and the rhyme scheme as well. some of them are freestyle (which is still good) while others are short and ruled down. If it doesn't start off rhyming, don't try to make it. Read some of my poems in my poems fic, "Sometimes you just..." and you'll see that they all either rhyme or don't. Sorry to sound so harsh, but that's what will bring your writing down, and I don't want to see that 'cause it's great work.
| Reviewed By: Anime Fan On: July 09, 2004 12:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
is it yami(atemu)?
| Reviewed By: Kirei [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2004 19:51 CDT
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Aww, so kawaii! I loved it! And I'm not gonna take a guess, cause I'm really bad at guessin!
| Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2004 20:22 CDT
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It just has to be Bakura 'cause I love the RyouxBakura pairing! Ah, well it could be Atemu 'cause AtemuxYugi is my second fave... But anyways, aren't all your fics rather... similar? I mean, I have 13 billion ideas floating around in my head but they are all so similar, I can't use all of them! SO anyways, love the angst, but try something slightly different next time, k? (not flaming 'cause I still love your dark writing)
| Reviewed By: DemonandGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: May 01, 2004 21:22 CDT
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Ooh, that's sad! My guess is either Bakura or Yami, since Malik isn't exactly the innocent type.
| Reviewed By: Black Angel Reaper [MediaMiner Member] On: May 01, 2004 20:52 CDT
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Didn't I read this before? *shrugs* Ah well, it was nice to read it again. I say that it's most likely either Bakura or Marik, possibly Yami if Yugi's suicidal. Update soon, k?
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