Title: Good for a first try
Reviewed By: jkBAKURA [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2004 19:02 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
First of all, I suggest reading it over two or three times before uploading. It's a good way to spot all of those pesky spelling and grammer errors, especially if you don't have spell-check. If all you are going for is writing some funj duels, that's OK, but if you have a long standing plot, you could try to make a more linear story. Another suggestion is to explain the card effects more for those who may not be as familiar with the game as the more dedicated fans. What I did like, was that you kept everyone in character. But remember that each character has a life and a personality and is not just a 2-d prop to use. Try to get inside their heads instead of just explaining what you are doing. Overall, it needs some develpoment, but potential is definately there. I do look foreward to what may develop in your fanfictioj carreer. Happy writing, JKB
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