| "Of Angels and Demons" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: ladykeeran On: August 08, 2005 02:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
The over-all story line, way you've written the characters and your grammar is very good, But I think you should take your time in developing the characters a little bit more. Conversation is needed too, when Ryo was staying with Dee to recouperate they hardly ever spoke yet they kissed 3-4 times I didn't really like that. It's as if they've fallen in lust instead if love. (With Dee I can get that but with Ryo...) I'm sorry it's usually not like me to critisize a writer like that, I hope you won't take it personally. Thank-you, Raven.
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Reviewed By: little orchid On: June 10, 2005 17:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really would like to read the next chapters and finish the story you do have great creativity keep it up.
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Reviewed By: cute boricua On: May 28, 2005 18:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i think you should finih all the stories you started especially the on with angel and demon i want to know if they met again
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Title: wander
Reviewed By: Forbidden Child On: September 26, 2004 16:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was cool story there! I love it and please continue with the next chapter! Please I think Is great! I love Dee being all fustrated and Ryo being so native. It's so cool Oh (cry) I love they way you make it so much fun for the guys to be in another world! Better than staying on earth thast for sure! Keep writing its great aqnd pif you don't mind finish the story too! I want to see ryo and dee together again!
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Reviewed By: aikyo On: June 15, 2004 13:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
if you dont continue i'll be very upset. its a very good story!
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Reviewed By: Splink On: May 22, 2004 12:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it. please continue. I'm want to know just how these two get toghether? and Whats wrong with Dee? Does he turn into a wolf or something? Will Ryo make and excuse to go back and see Dee? I want to know???!!!! please continue. I shall state again... I loved it
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Reviewed By: Subaru's Voice On: May 13, 2004 17:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
^_^ I absolutly love this story...please continue and have fun! Okay okay, sounded cheesy but what else can I say?! Good job!
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Reviewed By: kisuuna On: May 13, 2004 15:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yesyesyes, please go on with this! I like a good AU anytime, and this definitely is one :o)
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