| "A Hanyou's Love" Reviews/Comments [ 14 ] |
Reviewed By: animefanatic16 On: May 17, 2005 16:14 CDT
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I love your story! when kag's family arrives what wil they think of her being hanyou...inuyasha? will she tell them her story or lie? when is her time to turn human? keep it up and please update soon!
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Title: Nice
Reviewed By: animemaster168 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2005 22:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked this chapter alot. Maybe in the next chapter you could have Kagome and Inuyasha and the rest of the family sitting in the Living room and then Kagome's mother goes into her room and brings out a present for Inuyasha that she had saved for last. As Inuyasha opens the present he sees that inside the box is a picture of him and Kagome while they are sleeping in a tree in the feudal era. Then you could go on with the story as you like and Inuyasha's present to Kagome is the most beautifull diamond necklace with little ruby cut into little roses around a diamond and the whole design is what you think up next after that and then at night they have a little Inuyasha and Kagome tim in the well house. That could be cristmas part.3 and this one could have lemon in it if yo want to.
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Title: Great work!
Reviewed By: The Empty Shell On: February 26, 2005 13:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have really good ideas, but your spelling and plot lines need a bit of improvement. I loved the originallity of your fic, but there could be more action and suspense. Over all you are doing a really great job and I hope to be reading more of your work. You shouldn't beat yourself up, your writting is great. Add a little more detail and if you get writer's block try walking away and looking at pictures of the characters you're writting about. If you need any help my sn is BastSoulKeeperMC. Keep up the good work. I can't wait for the next chapter.
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Title: Update
Reviewed By: BradleySpecker On: January 14, 2005 20:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
your doing fine dont be too hard on yourself Please Update soon If you need anyideas feel free to mail me at B-Rad_Aquinas@hotmail.com Good Luck Later
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Reviewed By: Tina12345 On: December 10, 2004 15:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was pretty good. You're being too hard on yourself. By the way, I loved the other chapters! Please write your next one soon...
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Reviewed By: Tina12345 On: December 10, 2004 15:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was pretty good. You're being too hard on yourself. By the way, I loved the other chapters!
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Reviewed By: Julitica [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2004 19:49 CDT
Comment/Review:
If you would...CONTINUE!
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Title: wow
Reviewed By: khari eberhard On: July 07, 2004 14:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
well all I got to say is this is the besest story i have ever read !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!:)
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Reviewed By: Sesshoumarugrl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2004 22:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is sooooooooooooo good !!! Hey um what color are Kagomes eyes ?? are they Amber like InuYasha's ??? WEll I cant wait until the next one !!!!
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Reviewed By: Inu Yasha Fan 01 On: June 13, 2004 02:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Give Me MOOOOOOORE!!!!!!!!!!!!! I want More!!!!!!! (Tranlation)P;eaz hurry up and update!!!!!:)
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Reviewed By: Zelix [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2004 04:17 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to agree, don't hit yourself! That chapter was a lot of fun and it was good too! Hope to read more soon!
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Title: Spyrofate offers help
Reviewed By: spyrofate [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2004 13:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Don't beat yourself up over your TRULY AWESOME work!!! This story is VERY WELL written and I have enjoyed it A LOT!!!!!!!!! lol. The fluff is nice, the suspense is ok, the detail in the story in INCREDIBLE!!! If I like it this much....then as you update....expect to hear from me....FREQUENTLY!!!!!! lol. I've read you need help in writing, and since I recieved an award in high school for Creative Writing....lol....I think I can help you out if you wish!! If you want...email me at spyrofate@yahoo.com, and we'll see what we can come up with, just send your next chapter to me before you update and I'll look it over and offer whatever help I can. UPDATE SOON!!! Until then....
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Reviewed By: InuyashazLoverSoDealW/It On: May 23, 2004 16:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
Good so plz review I can't wait!^___^
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Reviewed By: missymoonshine On: May 09, 2004 02:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
k this is my first review for this story and l love it.i read the whole thing in under an hour today...k so wat im trying to say is keep writing
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