"Desecrate" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Kethry(not loged in darnit) On: August 18, 2004 07:51 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: **mouth work but nothing comes out for a long moment** This piece was beutiful. Yes thats a perfect word for it beutiful. Not everyone would think so I am sure but I am so damned move by it. The raw emoitons. Laid out for us to read, a look into a suffering we could never understand.... ro could some of us? I am so moved, I will admit I shed tears for the pain. Will you be contuing this piece into something more. Will Gohan finally relize what he is doing to them? Will Trunks finally inlighten he of the reasons this is happening? or will the unfished bond drag them both into the abyss? I want to know? darn my firewall, it will not let me log in. Wind to your Wings, KethryMoonDragon horselady11977@yahoo.com
| Reviewed By: 981974 On: August 11, 2004 09:49 CDT Comment/Review: Wow. * low whistle * this was deep. I love it. No solutions, no happy endings. The language was poetry, the story was soulfull. Beatiful and sad and breath taking.
| Title: wonderful& sacreligious Reviewed By: L_N (not logged) On: May 12, 2004 09:24 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: You worked so hard on this, and it shows. Every detail, every word is inset like a diamond. It's incredible, how Trunks offers himself up like this, and Gohan sees himself as some sort of true believer. Incredible because Trunks is the true believer. Or maybe both of them are? Every time I read this fic, I see new things in it. //"You forget, Gohan, I've met our God." Trunks scoffed. "If he'd been listening in the first place, then they wouldn't have needed a priest. And yes, I believe that everyone has their price." Everyone? I turned to face him. "What's yours?" And Trunks paused, cigarettes and coat in his hand. "Me? I'm obviously cheap."// That piece of dialogue has always struck me as so strong, so sad. everythign that's left unsaid... I realized,reading it this time, how you masterfully left out things to make them resonate. they don't declare their feelings. because they show them. saying what they feel- that seems right, doesn't it? - but it's not. because it's not a "right" situation. it's not supposed to be, either. Like trunks says, some roads don't take you anywhere. that's the real terror. not hell. but that there mightnot be heven or hell, just... a path. gods, this is the sexiest, most philosophical piece. The way they scratch and tear at each other. As if they can find redemption in that. can they? Sometimes i wonder? I wonder if i am judging too harshly by sayin gno. you make me think with this piece. every time i read it i see a new story. it's incredible. goes beyond fanfiction. goes beyond. *wow*
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