Reviewed By: Vuir (Vuirneen@writing.com) On: June 07, 2004 18:40 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Comment/Review:
I counted 4 separate tenses in this fic. As im walking home from ... Present Perfect? I was talking with my friend Brittany Past Perfect We talked about our favorite anime characters... Past Imperfect I blush and say ... Present You also might want to limit your use of the word "Then". I counted it nine times in two paragraphs. Reread before you post. I know you were excited to have something up, but publishing as soon as you're finished is never a good idea.
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