| "Learning To Trust" Reviews/Comments [ 44 ] |
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Reviewed By: Inubunny [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2004 14:59 CDT
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maha!! yet another great chappy!! i can not wait for the next udpate!! plz make it soon!!! i am just loving this story!!! much love never forget the love!!!! plz update!!!
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Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2004 05:33 CDT
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I have one thing to say, before I give the rest of the review. You have Rin ask "Am I Pregnant yet?" moments after she and Sesshomaru finish the act. Just so you know, it takes at least a couple of hours for the fertilization of an egg to occure. So if it has to be a couple of weeks after consception for doctors to even be able to recognize a pregnancy (offhand. If you were looking for one, the horomones would be detectable in your after about a day), then Sesshomaru would certainly not be able to smell anything moments after having $ex. That's just a thing that's bothered me.
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Reviewed By: MIztikal_Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2004 05:04 CDT
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ooo hopefully Kag gets over her fear.. Please keep up the great work. i so very much enjoy your stories... You're so very talented...Well now I'm off to bed! w00t! lol Krystal.
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Title: Truly a Master Piece
Reviewed By: Zonza [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2004 02:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to say that this is turly a work of art, and I love it dearly! This fic is one of my most favorite, your 'Takahashi High' being another one.... Anyways I just had a thought while I was reading this chapter. When my mom was trying to concieve me it didn't seem like she was ever going to get pregnate until some one suggested that she eat, this spicy food -think it was- anways it was suppose to make the sperm more active then usual -both gotta eat it too- and after a romp they were expecting me. I was thinking that you could have Kagome suggest it to Rin and thus -if you decide to make it work-would likely have Sesshoumaru lest tempted to kill her when he finds out. Though if you already have something planned then ignore my suggestion, I won't mind one bit! ^_^ ~Zonza
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Reviewed By: DeathChildInuLover666 On: August 27, 2004 01:58 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh that was so very good!! You did and ecellent job on this story and i cant wait ta read more of it!!Getting hurt must really suck but then again its a good excuse to write some more of your story....hehehe lol! I alwas get surprised when i learn that older people watch and write inuyasha fanfictions...well not really but its still funny cuz im so young i guess....13 is young rite??? Even though i look about 18!! ^-^ lol neways i LOVED your story it was awsome and i hope you update soon cuz i cant wait to read more especially the lemon between kagome and inuyasha!!! hehehe ^_~
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Title: So cute...
Reviewed By: Mic Mic [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2004 16:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wonder what is going to happen later on with Inuyasha and Kagome. I have to go back and read the Sess/Rin and Mir/San parts since I completly skipped them just to read about Inuyasha and Kagome's date. It gave me tingles when Inuyasha leaned over Kagome. He's so hot. I love his attitude in this story. Also I like the way you kept him in chracter and kag/Inu's relationship. It's realistic since Kag is afraid of Inu and isn't just all the sudden liking him while Inuyasha is trying to get her to like him. I wonder what'll happen when Sess finds out about Kag seeing the murder. I look forward to the next chappie and a Kag/Inu lemon... See Ya! ^_~ Mic Mic
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Reviewed By: szmadad [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2004 18:02 CDT
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Yippee..and update...and a date! I'm dying for Inu and Kagome to get together for real. That's the only lemon that I ever care for (but that's just me personally!) :) I love your version of Inuyasha though...he's tough, lethal, but he's got some charm that's coming through - perfect! Can't wait to see how you have Inu and Kagome move along in thier relationship.
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Reviewed By: Inubunny [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2004 17:13 CDT
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well at least that was better then my first date... o well!! any way!! i can not wait for the next update the story is going great and i love love love it!! but rin could always just go to a drug store they actually sell pills there for fertillity and such... or she could always buy a book they sell books one that as well... *blushes* any way... kag will probably need more convincing on goin on the second date wit inu and sango and miroku look like they have a bumpy road a head of them! so i wish u the best of luck with the story!! and much love never forget the love!!! the love is what makes the story so great!!! and plz update soon!!!
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Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2004 20:43 CDT
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First, you need some quotation marks in the beginning of the chapter. I don't think you started using them until the last third of the chapter. I would also suggest using indentations if you are keeping the format so squished together. It makes it easier to read. Also--I can't stress this enough--you always, always, always, break for a new paragraph and indent for dialogue. When a new person speaks, they get a new line. I only read the first third of the chapter, and from what I've read, the story is okay. Just fix those things that I mentioned.
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Title: wow......ok.....good job! ^_^
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn (not signed in yet) On: August 19, 2004 13:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow that was ..........good keep up the good wok update again soon i can't wate to see what happens! this fic is just so intresting and will Rin ever get pregnate? that's just so sad to see her like that! well it's your fic so keep up the good work and update again soon!!!!!! ^_^
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Title: VERRY GOOOD
Reviewed By: SerenityVRain On: August 07, 2004 14:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
very very very very very good! loved it! just keep updating, just keep updating, just keep updating, updating, updating! loved it very much! xoxo.
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Reviewed By: manda On: August 04, 2004 19:47 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is really awesome, I have to give you props! The plots awesome, and your writing definitly does it justice. It definitly flows, and it's not one of those storys you force yourself to read to get to the mindless shagging. It's good! Pwease (puupy dog eyes) update soon! It's been a while since I've actually found something worth reviewing, so I say: get back to work!!hehe... Manda evilyungone@yahoo.com
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Title: wow
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2004 17:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good job keep up the good work !! ^_^ update again soon please? this fic is frekin awsome!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Inubunny [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2004 14:11 CDT
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yet another great! i just feel sorta of sorry for kag she sorta got tricked into goin out with him! just like i was tricked... well any way! i hope that she has more luck wit inu then i had wit my bf! and much love never forget the love!! the love is what makes the story great! and y does sess not have rin c a doc and c what he could do to help her? there has got to b some way that she can have a child? and mayb that will help sess let kag live some way if kag is the one that helps her! which would b really cool! any way! plz update soon!! love the story!
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Reviewed By: SerenityVRain On: July 12, 2004 13:37 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HURRRRRRYYYYY COCA!! I LOVE THE STORY!!
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