| "Becoming Trunks" Reviews/Comments [ 35 ] |
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Title: nice chapt 4!
Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2004 14:47 CDT
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Simple, sweet, specific. I'm a sucker for understated drama, and so far I like yours. The restaurant scene had that whole first date familiarity and I'm so glad you didn't go broad with the humor and jostle the tone of the fic! I can't wait until Trunks parents find out what he's up to! debbiechan
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2004 11:48 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, this is a very good fic so far! You've really captured the turmoil of family life - parents not understanding the kids, kids not understanding the parents, siblings not understanding each other. It's a great concept - Trunks must have had a horrible time trying to live up to the image of his Mirai self. Vegeta's "apology" was very heartfelt yet still believable. I love Miyuki too! I can't wait to see how this fic progresses kiddo. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2004 22:18 CDT
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Interesting premise! What older woman wouldn't love to be in M's shoes? You've fleshed out this OC nicely--I totally buy her! And the opening argument btwn Trunks and his dad was perfect. I could hear it. Looking fwd to seeing how the dymanic btwn T & V resolves itself. One usually sees Mirai as being the angsty one with father issues, so this take is refreshing! I've always wondered about the post-Buu goings on in the Briefs-Vegeta household! debbiechan
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Reviewed By: Cauli [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2004 10:47 CDT
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Trunks is going to get an actual job 0_0. I can't wait to see what happens.
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Reviewed By: Cauli [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2004 15:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I see that you've changed the title, but the title is nothing compared to the story. Oh by the way, I love this story!!!!
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