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Title: Chapter 12
Reviewed By: blue dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2004 04:16 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oi the angst, the drama! what happened to Miyuki? Where is she? oh boy, so many questions, so little time! Update, can't wait!!! ^__^ love, BD.
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2004 21:07 CDT
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Oh no - relapse is the thing a recovering addict of any kind fears. Let's hope Miyuki didn't cave and is just somewhere doing some serious thinking. As rough as it was, I think Vegeta and Trunks needed that fight. Without it, I somehow doubt Vegeta would have made his offer at the end of this chapter. Very good work, once again!
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2004 21:33 CDT
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Oh damn. Poor Trunks. I guess he's going to college now. Possibly MIT. Where he could be within traveling distance of a New York Office and yet major in something dealing with Technology? Looking forward to reading more. -El-
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Reviewed By: LadyWindelf [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2004 12:20 CDT
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Another fun chapter! Poor Miyuki getting all covered by mud and all. Hope the dinner will be less dirtying. Continue!!!
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2004 22:19 CDT
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Ok, so far I've only written really short reviews (nothing to harp on). But I do try to leave at least one long review for every story that I follow. Um hm here it goes. This was just funny. The interaction with Goku and Vegeta had me rolling. Vegeta not liking technology and having trouble with a cell phone - I liked its place in the story and how you used it but I must admit I didn't buy it. It was the whole traveling throughout space and using a scouter to communicate thing. The driving was funny. Your characterizations are solid. I like the way you describe an emotion rather than tell the emotion (the cigarette thing). As far as headlines. In the tabloids: "Capsule heir gets mugged." "Briefs dad says no to new girlfriend." I think that the respectable papers would bury it on the society pages as a family fiasco. Ok, so its at least longer than all the others. Thank you for writing. -El-
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Title: not over the top--just right!
Reviewed By: debbiechannotloggedin [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2004 08:59 CDT
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not an over the top chapter at ALL! You write the family details so well--the breakfast, the nuances, the slight crush "piglet" has on Goten (awww!) all come through. I liked the revelation about M and Trunks' reaction. This is getting interesting....
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Reviewed By: LadyWindelf [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2004 08:37 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! Great chapter! Indeed, it is a very serious chapter. I think it's very realistic too. This part is one of hard moment in a couple. The next one will be how Trunks will react when Miyuki will chose to go to North America. Arrghhh!! can' t wait any longer!!! Please write it soon!!
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 20:32 CDT
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North America? Trouble on the horizon.
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2004 16:37 CDT
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yey! Everything's all better with Vegeta & Trunks! Let's all thank Vegeta for his lovely genes, shall we? ;-) I liked how T was less than suave the morning after, how you made M snap, and most of all, that little breakfast scene! I'm really enjoying this fic.
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 23:07 CDT
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Woo Hoo. Good Chapter. Sweet Lemon. I like Vegeta in this chapter.
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Reviewed By: Cauli [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2004 07:45 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh a cliffhanger ^_^....should have known
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2004 00:45 CDT
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Well Bulma was encouraging it. *grin* And at least no one saw him pick her up and fly off. Or did they? Update soon please. Thank you. -El-
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2004 00:22 CDT
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I'm fixated (happily) on the image of Trunks with an earring and can't seem to think of anything intelligent to type at the moment! So, the parents have found out! So M is a wonderful gal (she just gets better & better--don't make her too perfect, please? :-) Everyone else is so interestingly flawed--I love that. Looking forward to the next scene! debbiechan
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Reviewed By: LadyWindelf [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2004 14:20 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I luv it!! Please update soon! By the way, it's kinda impressive that Miyuki acknowledge so fast all what Trunks told her about Buu, his father being dead and bring back to life, about Trunks from the future! I just wanted to point that out.. Anyway continue your fic!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2004 18:05 CDT
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I feel Sorry for Vegeta. He wants to stay in touch with his son but doesn't know how to talk to him. Miyuki was right. Perhaps she will keep Trunks grounded and remind him to be thankful for what he has. I love how your friendships play out. "First off, what does she look like?" "Does it really matter what she looks like when planning our date?" "No," said Goten, "I just want to know what she looks like." Ewww. I can't believe Bulma was trying to direct his love life. Ewww. Thats just a place that a parent should not go unless the relationship is dangerous. Looking forward to your next chapter. -El-
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