| "Becoming Trunks" Reviews/Comments [ 35 ] |
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Title: not over the top--just right!
Reviewed By: debbiechannotloggedin [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2004 08:59 CDT
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not an over the top chapter at ALL! You write the family details so well--the breakfast, the nuances, the slight crush "piglet" has on Goten (awww!) all come through. I liked the revelation about M and Trunks' reaction. This is getting interesting....
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Reviewed By: LadyWindelf [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2004 08:37 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! Great chapter! Indeed, it is a very serious chapter. I think it's very realistic too. This part is one of hard moment in a couple. The next one will be how Trunks will react when Miyuki will chose to go to North America. Arrghhh!! can' t wait any longer!!! Please write it soon!!
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 20:32 CDT
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North America? Trouble on the horizon.
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2004 16:37 CDT
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yey! Everything's all better with Vegeta & Trunks! Let's all thank Vegeta for his lovely genes, shall we? ;-) I liked how T was less than suave the morning after, how you made M snap, and most of all, that little breakfast scene! I'm really enjoying this fic.
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 23:07 CDT
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Woo Hoo. Good Chapter. Sweet Lemon. I like Vegeta in this chapter.
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Reviewed By: Cauli [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2004 07:45 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh a cliffhanger ^_^....should have known
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2004 00:45 CDT
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Well Bulma was encouraging it. *grin* And at least no one saw him pick her up and fly off. Or did they? Update soon please. Thank you. -El-
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2004 00:22 CDT
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I'm fixated (happily) on the image of Trunks with an earring and can't seem to think of anything intelligent to type at the moment! So, the parents have found out! So M is a wonderful gal (she just gets better & better--don't make her too perfect, please? :-) Everyone else is so interestingly flawed--I love that. Looking forward to the next scene! debbiechan
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Reviewed By: LadyWindelf [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2004 14:20 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I luv it!! Please update soon! By the way, it's kinda impressive that Miyuki acknowledge so fast all what Trunks told her about Buu, his father being dead and bring back to life, about Trunks from the future! I just wanted to point that out.. Anyway continue your fic!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2004 18:05 CDT
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I feel Sorry for Vegeta. He wants to stay in touch with his son but doesn't know how to talk to him. Miyuki was right. Perhaps she will keep Trunks grounded and remind him to be thankful for what he has. I love how your friendships play out. "First off, what does she look like?" "Does it really matter what she looks like when planning our date?" "No," said Goten, "I just want to know what she looks like." Ewww. I can't believe Bulma was trying to direct his love life. Ewww. Thats just a place that a parent should not go unless the relationship is dangerous. Looking forward to your next chapter. -El-
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Title: nice chapt 4!
Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2004 14:47 CDT
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Simple, sweet, specific. I'm a sucker for understated drama, and so far I like yours. The restaurant scene had that whole first date familiarity and I'm so glad you didn't go broad with the humor and jostle the tone of the fic! I can't wait until Trunks parents find out what he's up to! debbiechan
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2004 11:48 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, this is a very good fic so far! You've really captured the turmoil of family life - parents not understanding the kids, kids not understanding the parents, siblings not understanding each other. It's a great concept - Trunks must have had a horrible time trying to live up to the image of his Mirai self. Vegeta's "apology" was very heartfelt yet still believable. I love Miyuki too! I can't wait to see how this fic progresses kiddo. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2004 22:18 CDT
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Interesting premise! What older woman wouldn't love to be in M's shoes? You've fleshed out this OC nicely--I totally buy her! And the opening argument btwn Trunks and his dad was perfect. I could hear it. Looking fwd to seeing how the dymanic btwn T & V resolves itself. One usually sees Mirai as being the angsty one with father issues, so this take is refreshing! I've always wondered about the post-Buu goings on in the Briefs-Vegeta household! debbiechan
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Reviewed By: Cauli [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2004 10:47 CDT
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Trunks is going to get an actual job 0_0. I can't wait to see what happens.
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Reviewed By: Cauli [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2004 15:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I see that you've changed the title, but the title is nothing compared to the story. Oh by the way, I love this story!!!!
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