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| "Bridge Over the Abyss" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Title: Fantastic!
Reviewed By: mel_buc [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2005 11:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my gosh! I knew the moment I saw that this was FY and Doctor Who that I would have to read it, but your execution went far beyond my expectations. I never knew crossover fics could be so good! They're usually inexplicable, but you've done a great job weaving the two worlds together. I love how you write both Chichiri (who's always been my favorite in FY) and the Doctor. I could ramble on, but I'm afraid I sat here reading instead of getting ready for class and now need to rush around in a panic. Please post the next chapter soon; I can't wait to read more!
| Title: FFARG
Reviewed By: Broken Visage [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2005 20:04 CST
Comment/Review:
You start off with some great imagery and you really have talent with description, as is shown throughout the whole of the third chapter (that was all I read) and your dialogue also seems to be very real, not forced as it is with some writers. One of the things that frequently bugs me is the use of too many adverbs when using "said" and other related verbs and you handle it very nicely, using a variety of verbs and not using adverbs every time. I'm searching through looking for something negative to point out but if there something, I keep missing it, it seems. There is a point where you use "facade" but because your word processor (MSWord?) adds the cedilla under the "c" it comes out with weird characters (ç) and that was rather distracting, but hardly your fault. I guess the one thing I could point out is your use of Japanese when not for names or fitting titles. All the terms are fine except for the "thank you" one. I always say avoid foreign languages like the plague unless they are names/fitting titles and it seems like it would be better as "thank you very much" instead of the Japanese equivalent. That's just personal feeling, though, and not a rule. Your writing is great; thank you so much for submitting to FFARG, I enjoyed it very much and will read through some more.
| Title: Peril879(Gawd I hate this sight)
Reviewed By: Peril879 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2005 16:26 CST
Comment/Review:
More please! Hey! Are Joss and Houjun gonna...? Ooooh! I'm a baka! Dun mind me!!! Keep writing! It;s good!
| Reviewed By: Peril8769(not logged on) On: October 08, 2004 17:21 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Depressing but I like it. I just like Chichiri more...
| Title: Me, again ^.^
Reviewed By: Hono On: August 15, 2004 13:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Um, yes, I do still love you fic............ Keep up the great work!!!
| Title: Oh, goody!!!^^
Reviewed By: Hono On: June 22, 2004 17:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, again, I repeat: WOW!!! I read White Stones in the Moonlight and really, and was very pleased with the way that Chichiri was portayed, and I was even more pleased at the final note saying that you would right one soaly about Chichiri. I love your wrighting style, keep up the great work!!!I look forward to reading more of you fics in the future.
| Reviewed By: jyn&tonnix On: May 30, 2004 15:08 CDT
Comment/Review:
I like this! Please keep writing! ^_^
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