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| "All Things Are Not What They Seem What To Be..." Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Title: Ok...
Reviewed By: Angel of forgotten souls [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2007 18:08 CDT
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Ok... this is getting annoying. I seach endlessly for a good story, i finally find an awsome one, and the author/authoress is being subborn, ignoring my plea's, and refusing to help me out and review. So, this story, is for you, and bacilly is my mesage to you: Tears of An Angel Rain poured from the heaven, tears made the skies turn black. A lone figure sits on a park bench, drenched, the rain blending with her tears. Her redish brownish hair fell into her face, as if to conceal the look of saddenss in her blue gray eyes. Her shoulders shook as she sobbed lightly into the sleeve of her crimson T-shirt. "Whats wrong?" asked a soft voice of a boy, standing above her. She looked up at him with a tear stained face. "I f-finally find a, a good fanfic a-and the wr-writer isn't updating." she cried, burying her face in his jacket. He looked on her with sympothetic eyes. "I'm sorry," he whispered. "There is no fate...no pain such a of suspence...what story?" "Things arn't what they seem to be," she replied, her voice muffled from his jacket. "Aw, such a good story, and stopped at such a good part," the boy sighed, shaking his head. She nodded, he could feel the movment on his chest where her face still was. "I hate it when that happens..." she said quietly. "Well," he said, trying to be optimistc. "At least we're making a long review for her to enjoy. "I didn't even get to see what happens when Bulma see's Vegeta's hand," said the girl sadly, having unattached herself from the stranger. "I hope our message gets through. And I hope this review doesn't get all screwed up. Like the quotes become boxes of something." "Well, even if she/he doesn't continue, we'll get through the pain together. No matter what happens," the boy assured. You see? I need an update!
| Reviewed By: Angel of forgotten souls [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2006 21:41 CDT
Comment/Review:
REEEVVVIIIEEEWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ! ORR I'LLLL DIIIIIIEEEEEE! -GIVE INNOCENT LITTLE SMILE- PLEASE????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ??????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? ???????????????????????????????????????????
| Reviewed By: Angel of forgotten souls [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2006 18:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this was really good! Please continue!
| Reviewed By: kitsuneluvuh [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2004 16:16 CST
Comment/Review:
You should start a new paragraph each time someone new speaks. It makes it easier to read, and is more efficient.
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