| "What a little flowers can do" Reviews/Comments [ 13 ] |
Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2007 07:06 CDT
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nice story... i really enjoyed reading it... although you don't write Inuyasha/Kagome pairings much... this one was great work... good job... (can you tell i like canon pairings better)... your other stories are interesting though... keep it up...
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Reviewed By: Sakouya [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2005 21:29 CST
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That was awesome! A great fic! Keep up the amazing work!~ (a bit cheesy :Pi know)
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Reviewed By: Mika Wolf [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2004 11:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You've got a very creative story going. I can't wait to read more of your works. I think you did all right in catching the characters' emotions. Keep it up!
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Reviewed By: gitrdun On: June 14, 2004 19:52 CDT
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oh, yeah, and don't listen to RedHerring. that guy loves the cock.
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Reviewed By: gitrdun On: June 14, 2004 19:50 CDT
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that was purrrrfect. her mom even aproves. that's handy. make another. I like the doggy style part.
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Title: E he he good! ^^
Reviewed By: cheepcheep On: June 11, 2004 17:45 CDT
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good work i loved it and thing with InuYasha i love ! he he he >^,^< MREOW!!!!! keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: Jensempai101 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2004 12:15 CDT
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it was ok...a bit rushed...
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Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2004 19:27 CDT
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*cholks* Must... not... demean.... Must... not... insult..../////////// Ok. First of all, you really need to check your grammar. Learn how to write dialogue as well. Don't say that your breaking away from the norm when you write dialogue like you do. It doesn't work, because that's just wrong. Aside from that, you had some places where it looked like a word was missing, or the wording was just odd. If you went over it again, you might find those mistakes. Or you could get a beta to do it for you. ////////////// Now the story was ok. It was a little corny, especially near the end. "A million stars of love..." or something like that. The flower idea was sweet, and adorable, but completely out of character for Inuyasha. So is hopping right into bed for Kagome. She can't be more than 17 in your fic, and I think she displays more morals than that in the anime/manga./////////// The lemon was very unoriginal. Not so much the setup, I've never seen that one done before, but the actual lemon. They followed the same motions, and there was hardly any . That's what makes a good lemon. The acutal--how do I say this--rutting is just a standard thing. Sure, there are positions that can change. There are things that they could do while they are rutting, but that's basically a set activity. Dirty talk, descriptive actions, and unusual-but-not-creepy-or-gross actions are always interesting to read about. Look at me, I sound like a grade "A" #ent@i. I don't mean to be, but I'm just trying to give you advice on writing something interesting. ///////// I hope I helped, and I was trying to be nice. Byebye!
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Reviewed By: dbzroks On: June 02, 2004 15:25 CDT
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that was good i liked it esp the end =^^=
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Reviewed By: dbzroks On: June 02, 2004 15:24 CDT
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that was good i liked it esp the end =^^=
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Reviewed By: dbzroks On: June 02, 2004 15:23 CDT
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that was good i liked it esp the end
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Reviewed By: Phoxy22 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2004 19:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Font Color I love this fic!! Its so cute and fluffy! Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: LightandDarkness4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2004 15:46 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hehhe..cute, this awesome! -Darkness-
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