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Title: Realy Nice
Reviewed By: VeRoN [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2004 22:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great two chapters. I love historical stories, please update soon, I want to know how Inu and Kag will get along. Anyway, I read luna chick's review and maybe you could take some of her pointers. I hope you don't find my comment insulting. So anyhow, update ASAP!
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Reviewed By: BirkysSpy On: June 09, 2004 17:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this. I like the idea. I hope you write more soon. I can't wait to read how the relationship between Kagome and Inuyasha progress.
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Reviewed By: sunshine07 On: June 09, 2004 14:41 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THAT WAS GREAT!!!!! i think ur doin a really good job on this story!!!!! i can't wait until Inu and Kag get to talk and fall in love : )
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Title: ME LIKE
Reviewed By: luna chick (not signed in) On: June 08, 2004 21:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You really have a knack for these historical plots. Few suggestions to keep you inspired: A Lady running away, in any period is a big scandal and disgrace. Kikyo's father has very limited options on how to redeme her honor. Force marrage, disownment, sending her to a convent, cover up, etc. You might want to work with that. Other than that, you are a really good writed and the only possitive criticism I can think of is to suggest you practice the showing instead of telling when giving us information about the past. Right now it looks like you gave us a brief two paragraph sumary you would give a teacher in class. Try to disguise it, perhaps a flashback, she telling someone. Don't give us all the answers right away. Play with what you give people so that the audience can piece it together. It keeps your readers on the edge of their seat. I hope you continue and good luck, Nena
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Reviewed By: musheesuh On: June 08, 2004 15:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
It's getting interesting, =)
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Reviewed By: sunshine07 On: June 08, 2004 12:54 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story seems very interesting!!!! I REALLY LIKE IT!!!!!!! Plz update VERY SOON!!!!!!! i hope its a I/Ka story : )
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