Title: Interesting
Reviewed By: Levi/Talin On: June 24, 2004 02:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to admit it is interesting. Very intersting if but a little hard to follow at first. The ending, not my favorite part of it. I liked how you added feelings to Kagura. I like how you made her more than just an incarnation of Naraku. How you expressed their feelings. the () parts were a bit unneeded. The story can still flow without these. Or at least remove teh () and add the text to the rest of the story. These seem to take away from the flow of the story. Or well that's how I personally feel about it. Good job though. Very good job.
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