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Title: wow...
Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2009 10:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I didn't expect this to be the last chapter. It was great. I have to say that the ending really does make sense. Thanks so much for finishing the story. I think I have enjoyed reading this more than any other story I have ever read. I hope you do something else great in the future!
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2008 17:26 CDT
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Ah, they kissed, but they are still so tentative around each other. Goku is being so careful, I really feel for him as he obviously wants to just sweep Vegeta off his feet, but feels he needs to be cautious as Vegeta could reject him at any time. Vegeta has some underlying issues caused by Frieza, I hope he can explai more to Goku on their restaurant date. Still Vegeta said he wants to have sex with him, just not yet, so things are looking up :)
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Reviewed By: k3151 On: October 01, 2008 22:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow your story is going so well! :D i love the interactions between goku and vegeta and the suspense! oh my gosh.
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Title: omg
Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2008 17:01 CDT
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You bring more updates, so sweet! I loved how you portrayed their feelings especially this chapter. I love how Vegeta puts off Kakarott, not wanting to rush into things. This kiss was great, such an interesting way you wrote the scene. I just love how you write, and how you explain the characters and their feelings. I'm so happy you're updating this again, so so happy! Another great update! I await for another wonderful chapter to follow. ^_^
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Reviewed By: snoopy99eb [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2008 15:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story! The characters are so perfectly written, I don't have to stretch my imagination to actually see this happening. I've had this story bookmarked forever and I've probably read it 3 or 4 times now. I can not wait until the next update!
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2008 19:11 CDT
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Such a good story! I like how you have kept them relatively in character so far. The gradual growing of Goku's feelings now that he and Vegeta are spending more time together, as he becomes annoyed and dissatisfied at how Chichi treats him and their waning relationship. Vegeta's feeling of emptiness within his life, taking solice in his spars with Goku and growing closer to him. I just hope we don't have to wait another year for the next update!
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Title: !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2008 12:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Wow, you listened to me! But then you gave me this evil cliff hanger, why? I am so happy you updated, and I really enjoyed reading your work again. I found it very amusing that Goku decided to confide in Krillin like that, and I think that's exactly how Krillin would respond, too. I really hope you will post more soon, I am very anxious now to see more!
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Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2008 01:00 CDT
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Hey you need to update this! I really wish you would =) It's one of the best GxV fics out there, you know and I've read a bunch.
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Reviewed By: akito_sweet_insanity [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2008 23:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is so beautiful. It's poetic in how it's written, and I love the story that you tell. I felt so sorry for Vegeta when Bulma broke up with him without even giving him a chance to speak about his feelings on the matter. I felt quite bad for Goku as well, in his deteriorating relationship with Chichi--which you depicted very well, by the way. You managed to paint the picture of the unhappy couple that they probably are, without bashing either one of them. In fact, you've portrayed all of the characters very accurately and the situations they face are realistic. I am impressed with pretty much every aspect of this story and I am really excited to see where you go with this. Please update soon. :)
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Reviewed By: Katiefoolery [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2007 06:39 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This is so beautifully written; I do love coming across writers who have a distinct style that is unique yet doesn't distract from the story itself. I'm also enjoying the subtlety of the story here and the way both Goku and Vegeta are changing so slowly but surely. The thoughts going through Goku's mind as he was lying on the grass seemed so natural and compelling - it was a small scene but I loved it and I think I could almost taste Goku's confusion at the end there, thanks to your vivid writing. I hope you have plans to continue this story because I'm quite addicted to it now.
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Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2006 20:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've enjoyed reading this fic, I've read bit in the past and I am happy that you've updated recently. I like it very much because you do a very good job of keeping goku and vegeta in character. Very good job keep updating!
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Reviewed By: chibigoku [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2006 19:47 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAAY! you updated atlast ^.^ ~ cool chapter, i like the conversations between vegeta and goku. i don't know what it is about them but, i just like the converse between them in this fic *shrugz* ~ and vegeta seem to be having more thinking bouts than usual, he's also catching himself out more often and seems to be a bit more open too (asking goku those questions at the end O_o) ~ anywayz, update again soon... please? n.n;; ~ (side note, if none of this made sense it's because i'm tired... again.. and i also got the flu so... uum... sorry..)
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Title: 1-8
Reviewed By: chibigoku [MediaMiner Member] On: September 25, 2006 11:46 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i'm loving this fic! how comes you haven't updated yet?? = ( ~ this is really cool i hope you do update sometime ~ sorry if this is a short review, i'm just a little tired and the words i want to write aren't coming to my head right now ^_^;;
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Reviewed By: shivalatina [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2006 16:52 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This is nice. I hope you finish it soon.
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Title: Wonderful...
Reviewed By: alexandraite [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2005 03:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is just awesome. You're style of writing makes me really feel what the characters feel and see what they see. I can't wait to read more and see how this will all unfold. It's just awesome!
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Reviewed By: QueenSaiyan [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2005 23:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update this soon, it's been a long time since I've read an excellent fanfic like this. The way Goku reached out towards Vegeta while half asleep was just perfect, and not cliche or forced like in other fics. Hopefully my review will be a bit of incentive to update! Great work. I'm hanging out for more.
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Reviewed By: Love Of Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2005 09:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This has got to be the best G/V fic Ihave ever read!! I especialy like the way you have taken your time in creating a sort of relationship between Goku and Vegeta, and not just following the; 'I've always loved him I just never admitted it' cliche most G/V's follow. I can really imagine this happening, and the characters are very genuine. Your style of writing is unique and I feel like I'm reading a best-selling novel! You're a really talented author. I like the way you've potrayed both of the saiyans' relationships with their family, and the impact of Frieza on Vegeta's character and behaviour. I think your interpretation of Chi-chi is fantastic, the way she treats Goku like her son, and how everything seems rehearsed, like in a play. The break-up between Bulma and Vegeta was very believable, and I am liking how you are going into depth with everyone's character. Please hurry with the updates I think this story is amazing, and I really can't wait to read your next chapter!
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2005 21:09 CST
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If this thing ever lets me post this review!!!!The last two paragraphs at the end were my favorite. It is something of a rather rude awakening isn't it. As always the writing is poetry. You are actually one of the few writers who inspires me to write. Look forward to being inspired more. -El-
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Reviewed By: LisaB (not logged in) On: March 23, 2005 16:41 CST
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Excellent work. I really love Vegeta discovering himself. It's like he was in a holding pattern, but now he's moving on. I always have problems with "Bulma deciding to ditch Vegeta" fics, but you are doing one of the best selling jobs on this premise. Again, excellent.
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Reviewed By: sinningia On: December 09, 2004 13:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I greatly enjoyed reading this one... I hope you update... and fast as I long to see another chapter. Very nice, how you desrcibe the emotions and have Vegeta and Goku act around each other. I like the way you write mostly out of Goku´s point of view since Vegeta IS the more mystirious one and having him think/ or speak out all his thoughts reveals too much... I really like the way you potray them, the feelings Goku has towards his wife and sons... the way he comes to realize things! An overall YAY for you! Very god work! ~sinningia~
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Reviewed By: LisaB [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2004 11:04 CST
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I must say that I'm not much of a fan of long-chapter yaoi, but this may change my mind. Perhaps because this is really more about Vegeta discovering himself? Goku as well. (I so loved the scene in bed with Chi Chi. Beautiful.) They way you have these two discovering each other is mesmerizing. I hope to see more soon. BTW, "Don't Pass Me By" is the name of a song too. Special Prize if you name the group! *winks* Please do like deb asks and stop by the Salon. We'd love to see you!
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2004 15:08 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. This story is very well done. "Zero gravity. No handholds" is that line that hooked me. It's hard to write this lost a Vegeta without sinking into indulgent Vegeta torture or wallowing in the angst. Your writing is so clean and suggests so much with a very minimalistic style of description. It's restrained poetry. I'm very impressed. I look forward to reading more of your work! I noticed that you're a member at the Salon! Stop by again (http://s8.invisionfree.com/Dbz_Fanfic_Salon) bc I'm going to start a thread on your work--I'm really pleased I've discovered it!!!
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Reviewed By: Tenchica On: November 22, 2004 07:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, since I'm enjoying your story Sing No Songs I thought I'd give this other fic a try. To say the least, I wasn't disappointed. On the contrary, I've really liked what you've posted so far: It's very well-written with an insight on the characters that's just making you learn more and more about them. Please update this soon!
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Reviewed By: FallenAngel7901 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2004 23:28 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story :) Can't wait to read more
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2004 23:09 CST
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Am I at least reviewing this on the other site? I hope so because this is a really good story. I like the pace that this story is building up at. it allows for alot of character development and for things to procede at a more natural pace. Thank You for writing -El-
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Reviewed By: pixelgoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2004 20:49 CST
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Goku seems to be developing a simmering, growing anger while still confused, trying to figure out where it is coming from. It is almost like he is channeling the old Vegeta, but internalizing his reaction where Vegeta would have expressed his displeasure. Why aren't you getting more reviews? It isn't right - this is well written. (Although *shakes fist* you better update faster!)
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Reviewed By: Lemony Fresh [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2004 18:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
...that's it? oh you have got to be shitting me! i must read more! and more V+G(K) WAFF! fluffiness! lol i love their pairing! i dont like Bulma...or Chi-Chi...ick! =^-^=
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Title: as loyalty can be
Reviewed By: ccfleursdelys [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2004 08:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like this story however i hope that v and b will patch things up they are so cute as a couple wait for the next chapter c
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Reviewed By: pixelgoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2004 21:09 CDT
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Vegeta just seems...numb. He hasn't really reacted to anything, just floated around in events. In some stories, Goku showing him the house where he grew up would have upset Vegeta - sort of like rubbing in the prince's lack of a childhood home. It is nice to see Vegeta reacting to Goku and not his angry interpretation of Goku's intentions. It sounds like he isn't involved in Trunks' life at all. Waiting eagerly for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: pixelgoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 18:49 CDT
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Nice description of Vegeta foundering in zero-g. He just seems so out of his element, and doesn't know how to react to any type of friendship. His moving the strand of Bulma's hair was a nice touch.
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