| "As Loyalty Can Be" Reviews/Comments [ 31 ] |
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Reviewed By: Love Of Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2005 09:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This has got to be the best G/V fic Ihave ever read!! I especialy like the way you have taken your time in creating a sort of relationship between Goku and Vegeta, and not just following the; 'I've always loved him I just never admitted it' cliche most G/V's follow. I can really imagine this happening, and the characters are very genuine. Your style of writing is unique and I feel like I'm reading a best-selling novel! You're a really talented author. I like the way you've potrayed both of the saiyans' relationships with their family, and the impact of Frieza on Vegeta's character and behaviour. I think your interpretation of Chi-chi is fantastic, the way she treats Goku like her son, and how everything seems rehearsed, like in a play. The break-up between Bulma and Vegeta was very believable, and I am liking how you are going into depth with everyone's character. Please hurry with the updates I think this story is amazing, and I really can't wait to read your next chapter!
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2005 21:09 CST
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If this thing ever lets me post this review!!!!The last two paragraphs at the end were my favorite. It is something of a rather rude awakening isn't it. As always the writing is poetry. You are actually one of the few writers who inspires me to write. Look forward to being inspired more. -El-
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Reviewed By: LisaB (not logged in) On: March 23, 2005 16:41 CST
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Excellent work. I really love Vegeta discovering himself. It's like he was in a holding pattern, but now he's moving on. I always have problems with "Bulma deciding to ditch Vegeta" fics, but you are doing one of the best selling jobs on this premise. Again, excellent.
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Reviewed By: sinningia On: December 09, 2004 13:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I greatly enjoyed reading this one... I hope you update... and fast as I long to see another chapter. Very nice, how you desrcibe the emotions and have Vegeta and Goku act around each other. I like the way you write mostly out of Goku´s point of view since Vegeta IS the more mystirious one and having him think/ or speak out all his thoughts reveals too much... I really like the way you potray them, the feelings Goku has towards his wife and sons... the way he comes to realize things! An overall YAY for you! Very god work! ~sinningia~
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Reviewed By: LisaB [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2004 11:04 CST
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I must say that I'm not much of a fan of long-chapter yaoi, but this may change my mind. Perhaps because this is really more about Vegeta discovering himself? Goku as well. (I so loved the scene in bed with Chi Chi. Beautiful.) They way you have these two discovering each other is mesmerizing. I hope to see more soon. BTW, "Don't Pass Me By" is the name of a song too. Special Prize if you name the group! *winks* Please do like deb asks and stop by the Salon. We'd love to see you!
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2004 15:08 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. This story is very well done. "Zero gravity. No handholds" is that line that hooked me. It's hard to write this lost a Vegeta without sinking into indulgent Vegeta torture or wallowing in the angst. Your writing is so clean and suggests so much with a very minimalistic style of description. It's restrained poetry. I'm very impressed. I look forward to reading more of your work! I noticed that you're a member at the Salon! Stop by again (http://s8.invisionfree.com/Dbz_Fanfic_Salon) bc I'm going to start a thread on your work--I'm really pleased I've discovered it!!!
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Reviewed By: Tenchica On: November 22, 2004 07:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, since I'm enjoying your story Sing No Songs I thought I'd give this other fic a try. To say the least, I wasn't disappointed. On the contrary, I've really liked what you've posted so far: It's very well-written with an insight on the characters that's just making you learn more and more about them. Please update this soon!
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Reviewed By: FallenAngel7901 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2004 23:28 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story :) Can't wait to read more
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2004 23:09 CST
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Am I at least reviewing this on the other site? I hope so because this is a really good story. I like the pace that this story is building up at. it allows for alot of character development and for things to procede at a more natural pace. Thank You for writing -El-
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Reviewed By: pixelgoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2004 20:49 CST
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Goku seems to be developing a simmering, growing anger while still confused, trying to figure out where it is coming from. It is almost like he is channeling the old Vegeta, but internalizing his reaction where Vegeta would have expressed his displeasure. Why aren't you getting more reviews? It isn't right - this is well written. (Although *shakes fist* you better update faster!)
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Reviewed By: Lemony Fresh [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2004 18:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
...that's it? oh you have got to be shitting me! i must read more! and more V+G(K) WAFF! fluffiness! lol i love their pairing! i dont like Bulma...or Chi-Chi...ick! =^-^=
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Title: as loyalty can be
Reviewed By: ccfleursdelys [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2004 08:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like this story however i hope that v and b will patch things up they are so cute as a couple wait for the next chapter c
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Reviewed By: pixelgoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2004 21:09 CDT
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Vegeta just seems...numb. He hasn't really reacted to anything, just floated around in events. In some stories, Goku showing him the house where he grew up would have upset Vegeta - sort of like rubbing in the prince's lack of a childhood home. It is nice to see Vegeta reacting to Goku and not his angry interpretation of Goku's intentions. It sounds like he isn't involved in Trunks' life at all. Waiting eagerly for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: pixelgoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 18:49 CDT
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Nice description of Vegeta foundering in zero-g. He just seems so out of his element, and doesn't know how to react to any type of friendship. His moving the strand of Bulma's hair was a nice touch.
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Reviewed By: pixelgoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2004 22:24 CDT
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Very nice start. I have a huge amount of sympathy for Vegeta. He always seems so uncomfortable and unsure, but not willing to let anyone know that. You bring that across very well. Looking forward to you getting the Goku and Vegeta together. (A few minor mistakes towards the end of the second chapter, but nothing major.)
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