| "Don't Touch Me" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: animebishieluver On: June 04, 2005 00:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you know what? you're right. quarter after eleven isn't that late. I'm not up late either. It's only 1:19... AM. yeah. good story, brittany-chan likes! please update!
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Reviewed By: Hecates_slave [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2004 21:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
I like this. Very nice. Keep up the good work
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Title: Ch. 2
Reviewed By: Blkwidow77 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 15:12 CDT
Comment/Review:
Well, That was a bit odd... *laughs* I'm not sure what I think of the switch of the age of the voices. When Veya snapped, I could see that she developed a split personality but that it would make her capable immediately of very grown up style language and thoughts, might be stretching it. Other then that, I think it's still interesting!
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Title: Ch. 1
Reviewed By: Blkwidow77 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2004 19:40 CDT
Comment/Review:
So here I am. *yawns* I've come to pick at your story.... *ahem* I meant to check it out! I decided that I liked the way you worded things in my review you wrote and decided your writing style may be similiarly interesting. I don't believe I was mistaken in that. I like the voice of this "ageless girl". It's a nice start. Although.... rather short. *ahem* At any rate, I'd be careful. The theme you choose is one that has been used by others in fanfiction A LOT. So you will have to give it a very different flavor or you will lose people's interest. *gets ready to swing if you get aggressive* But we will see. I think I'll stand by to throw tomatos at you if you get off course... *ahem* I mean, gently guide you back! *pulls at her shirt uncomfortably*
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Reviewed By: Mala Darkling [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2004 14:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought the idea was very clever, though I never expected to see something like this on a fan fiction site. In the first and the beginning of the second chapter, the way Veya/Nirvana was thinking seemed a little odd. I couldn't put my finger on it. Also, Veya/Nirvana seemed a little grown up for a five year old in parts. Although, since shes a demon, and I've never met a kid who went through something that horrible, I couldn't say. Well, I'm waiting for you to update ~_^
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