| "When We Grow Up" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
Reviewed By: KawaiiHonya [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2009 20:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Idea. Lots of grammatical errors.things unclear but eventually i could tell what you were saying. it kinda killed the flow of the story. the way it was fast and almost animalistic was a great breakaway from the normal sweet and soft other authors use.
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Reviewed By: riku-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: May 19, 2005 14:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
look, i really like numisma's writing, but i have to disagree. The sex ed thing is just totally irrelevant. Loved the style, the awkwardness, the frantic lovemaking and such!!! btw. I'm dutch...and we/I never even had anything like sex ed until i was like 12. and by then I'd already had my period and such besides..kids learn everything from peers. I just wonder how the peers know...aaargh i'm rambling aren't i... Summary then: Loved it! Do more stuff like this. Seriously!!!!
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Reviewed By: DarkAvenger On: April 28, 2005 01:06 CDT
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my fav part... inu in chains and leather... ooooh, that would be a blessed sight to see. :0)
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Reviewed By: gittelbug(when loged in) On: February 08, 2005 22:16 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story. As for the 6 year old thing who cares. Sex ed is taught at diffrent ages in diffrent places becides it's fanfiction.And them being 16 so what? Pleanty of 16 year olds have and sex. Aside from that awsome story! This is one of my favs!
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Reviewed By: AndreahTreole [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2004 16:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't care what anyone else says, I liked it. And about the 'six-year-old sex thing', my MOM had the birds and the bees talk with me when I was five. It's nothing new. Its a humans way of showing affection or lust... Anyway, now that I have totally and utterly confused you, I shall leave and add this story to my favorites for future reading ^^
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Reviewed By: laura aka Gittelbug On: July 17, 2004 22:43 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story. I like the plot of it and how Inu and start off and end up in the tree house. Great story. As for the comments about sex for 6 year olds.. who remebers when they were 6 i mean it's possable to know about sex at 6, why not? keep up the good work!!
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Reviewed By: Kagome69 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 20:23 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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hey this was great... you should write one more often!! do u think u could make one like this about a girl named tamara and send it to me at tamara_liozo@hotmail.com plz
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Reviewed By: Jensempai101 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 11:30 CDT
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wow...sex classes bein taught tu 6 year olds?...kinda bold but that was all rite!!...awesum fic...continue with it or keep writing more stories...ok later
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Reviewed By: Lainey [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 09:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alrighty, where do I start? Just to clear it out Numisma is right. I have never heard of Sex Ed. being given to children that young, but children can pick up on sex at that age. My parents weren't that modest about their sex. They always left the door open, and you never knew where they were going at it. I picked up on sex at maybe 6, 7, or even 8, of course I never picked up on safe sex until we had Sex Ed. Although this was a major detail in your story it shows their friendship and trust, and it sets your story apart from all the rest making it unique, and I like unique. I hope you continue to write more soon. You've made it on my list, and I expect the very best from you.
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Reviewed By: Numisma [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 04:55 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
tripe. sex ed for six year olds is never that explicit. children that young usually cannot comprehend stuff that complex quite yet, yet you're giving young Inu and Kag the quality of being "enlightened" with as much info about sex as someone in the 7th grade. the writing itself, especially the awkwardness between them at age 16, is pretty well written, but that alone cannot save the fic.
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Title: omg
Reviewed By: Lunar_Storm [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 04:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that story kicked so much ass i cant even descibe it woh damn lol holy hell lol that really got my stomic in nots lol lol please god write more lol well i mean more storys like it lol it kick omg lol lol i just wanna scream it made all my thoughts go away i could so see the whole thing y i was reading it lol omg i wanna read it again lol sorry this thing is so long i just cant explain how much i love this story lol lol god i hope u have more like it lol more people should write like u damn lol your a fuckin great ass writer lol well shit lol im gonna go before i scream because i just fuck man lol.... lol its fuckin 4:33 in the morning lol so ya im gonna check out n see if u have anymore storys n if u dont lol im just gonna find other shit like this lol sooooooooooooooooooooooo cya lol sorry for it being so long agian bye bye ^_^
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Reviewed By: Laura-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2004 02:12 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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That was great! A Great, cool and original lemon! I loved it, especially the agressiveness and the force of their 'act'... you have to write more! Good work! ^_^ *thumbs up*
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Reviewed By: Hentai-fan On: June 21, 2004 23:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! Great job! Hope to read more by you!
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Title: One shot ?!
Reviewed By: sexy_capricorn [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2004 23:39 CDT
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THIS WAS GREAT AND I WOULD SIMPLY LUUVVEE YOU TO DO A LONGER A VERSION OF THIS
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Reviewed By: Lemony Fresh [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2004 22:27 CDT
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hahahahaha!!!! omg that was great! nice job ^_^ it was cute and sweet and definitely funny. this probably would have turned out cool as an AU not just a OneShot. like to have them actually be in school and then leading up to this part of the "story" ah oh well it was real good! i think Inuyasha would look maad hot with his bracelets and chains
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