| "Crazy Night" Reviews/Comments [ 14 ] |
Title: Brilliant!
Reviewed By: Mixed-Starz [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2007 10:02 CST
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0_0 Man, first timer in ya story and wow. Hit by a hord of lemons, so coolx! Plx updatie! So loving ya story caux I like GaaraxNaruxSasu their my fav charactors in Naruto! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Honey sue [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2005 02:31 CDT
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OMG!!! lemons everwhere!!!...oh well i really enjoyed it...its kinda funny gaara and sasuke fucking naruto! lol ...is it finished already?? cause you havent updated it since august 2004...anyway i love it...i dont know why thou.....
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Reviewed By: Inazuma Ookami On: February 04, 2005 22:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed the fic and the sex, etc. etc. I honestly don't care very much for people putting you down. You shouldn't give two shits what they think, but honestly, your writing style could be improved. The fic is very entertaining though. XP
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Title: okay...?
Reviewed By: ryuuki-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2004 23:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alrighty then. This is... odd, to say the least. I loves me mah yaoi, but this is kind of off. It's not the pairings, but the writing itself. The spelling and grammar is a bit wonky. Maybe I would enjoy it more if I didn't nitpick so much but... In the end, if the mechanics aren't right, I can't get into it. Sorry. ^^;
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Reviewed By: akuma_river [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2004 16:49 CST
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Interesting. So is Itachi going to come after his Naruto? Keep up the good work. coolsa.
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Reviewed By: sango_demon_exterminator [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2004 19:37 CDT
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Apathetic Psychopath if your going to flame this Author you should do it when ur logged in cause that just proves your scared the aouthor will yell at you. But I do agree with Apathetic Psychopath that you should put rape in the summary. I'm not a big yaoi infact this is the first and last yaoi fic I'll ever read. Please update though and don't quit writing cause of Apathetic Psychopath infact you should write more just to bug the jerk ;)
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Reviewed By: Apathetic Psychopath On: August 25, 2004 16:03 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
I didn't enjoy this fic because it's basically a rape fic. The entire story is based around several people repeatedly raping/coercing Naruto. It's sick and disgusting. Bloody put in your summary/warning that it's a rape fic, sicko. Also, the only character *in character* was Kakashi, with his rediculous excuses for being late, thus upping the rating of the fic from a big fat you-are-so-crap-at-this-it-makes-me-sick 0, to an at-least-you-got-*something*-right 1. Give up writing - you're spelling and grammar is atrocious and your style of writing is so horrid it hurts.
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Reviewed By: kayoko-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2004 21:39 CDT
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well, here i am..i read a few chapters of the fic. Let me start by saying that this isn't my style of fic..i usually go for the more emotional ones...or just pwp lemons. // Some of your sentences are too short, they seem very choppy at times. From the first three chapters that i read, you're overusing "he said", "she said", "i yelled" that kinda stuff. It's really pulling away from the action. Word it so the character is actually doing the action instead of commenting it from another person's POV. //Instead of using the day and time, think you can use "one day later" or "an hour earlier"? It just makes it easier to keep track of time. // Noticed a few typos (i.e. cloths instead of clothes, mussels? isn't that the stuff you eat? or do you mean muscles?)// you keep switching POV...one minute we're listening to naruto talk about himself..the next...we're in a third person's pov. It's weird, i know you state whose pov it is, but still...try to keep it to one. // However, i only read the first few chapters...so maybe it got better? Dunno. But yeah..the characters are great, in fact, they're hilarious ^_^ I love how you've portrayed Naruto. I think we just needed to see a deeper plot in the beginning (or maybe even hints of it). // Thanks for writing, hope this helps.
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Reviewed By: izumi On: July 30, 2004 11:49 CDT
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maaaa... what happened??? the chapter is not finished.. please finished the lemon!!! pweesh!!
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Reviewed By: Dreamers On: July 26, 2004 21:47 CDT
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the chapter ended in the middle of a sentence.
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Reviewed By: Dreamers On: July 26, 2004 21:45 CDT
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the chapter ended in the middle of a sentence.
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Reviewed By: Dreamers On: July 26, 2004 21:44 CDT
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the chapter ended in the middle of a sentence.
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Reviewed By: Dark Princess(too lazy ta sign in) On: July 13, 2004 02:36 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like the story a lot but you need to go back through it and fix some things. and why is Naruto that stupid? oh well ^_^ its good and i really like it ill be sure to mark it for checking up on later :D Ja ne ~*~Dark Princess~*~
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Reviewed By: ice-lolli333 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2004 12:26 CDT
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well....I liked it but...I think that these people have major problems at the hospital. I mean, really! it seems like all of the doctors are just trying to screw the patients! But I think that's funny. :)
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