| "True Feelings Get In The Way" Reviews/Comments [ 52 ] |
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Title: Keep Going!
Reviewed By: VeRoN [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2004 23:32 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think that you should keep writing. It's not as bad as you may think!! If all of us gave up just because we think it sucks then for certain i would delete my fic cause my grammar sucks and i mean really sucks, but hey! that doesn't mean i can't keep writing. Not everybody has been born with the capacity to write, and you'll see that you will improve a lot from the first chapters as you go on. So don't give up so easily! Nice first chapter, and I really hope you will go on, if not, I'll see you in your next fic. :)
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Reviewed By: Niffy [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2004 13:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! I think you should continue on this one. It started out SO great!! I think you should continue on so you get practice from your first ones then you can make you next stories more better. I think this story is already great. I love it aloready. I was hooked on the first sentence!!!! Just please continue!!! PLEASE! Oh by the way I love how you put labels like the Iversons and the 2004 Lexus and stuff, that is cool! *thumbs up* My older brother is hooked on cars and shoes and its rubbin off on me. I like how you put labels instead of like 'red shoes' or a 'red car'. I liked that. :) It's GREAT SO KEEP ON WRITING...CONTINUING THIS STORY!!!! PLEASE continue!!
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Reviewed By: inu fan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2004 12:58 CDT
Comment/Review:
I like this story alot!! Please continue!!!
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Reviewed By: LoSt_gUrL8o8 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2004 23:39 CDT
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u shuld still keep on writin dis story because it can help you with your writin thingy that u said u needed to work on so y not work on it while doin ur story?..as long as we can read it and understand it...it seems great to me..
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Title: continue
Reviewed By: daniy [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2004 19:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
continue the story. :) its really good, i think your writing skills are fine (and don't let anybody tell you different!)my writing skills got better as i wrote, with the help of my editor of course *pulls editor into big hug* i loves my editor! *ahem* sorry i'm really hyper, anyways keep writing the fic, i want to read what happens next. danke, daniy jinx
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Title: plz dont leave
Reviewed By: CrystalMaiden87 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2004 18:49 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
CONTINUE THIS STORY PRETTY PLEASE BEGS and WHIMPERS LIKE A DOG HEHE
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Reviewed By: Biganimefan1 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2004 17:31 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I THINK YOU SHOULD CONINUE THIS STORY
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Reviewed By: Michi-Chan6 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2004 16:58 CDT
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You already know that I think you should continue this story. True you maybe new to writing but what better way to improve your skills than to post what you write for others to comment on? I think that you don't write like someone who hasn't written before...Have you seen some of the stories posted on ff.net? They make yours look like a pro wrote them. I hope you continue this fanfic. Ja ne
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Reviewed By: animeluver17 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2004 16:31 CDT
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I liked it! Write more.
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Title: hmm this is annoying it wont let me review!!!
Reviewed By: Michi-Chan6 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2004 13:29 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You can't quit!I like that fanfic and I thought it had a lot of potential. I don't want you to discontinue it. I'm sad now.
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2004 11:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is your first fic so I'll try to tell you all of your problems. Don't think I'm being mean or anything, I wouldn't do that because I remember when I was writing my first story too. Style of Writing:6: Because your lines are too short and choppy. The only discriptions that we get are what they're wearing and if the story is set in Japan they wouldn't be wearing any of that to school anyway. Spelling and Grammar:5: Well there are a lot of spelling errors, such as apostrophes in the wrong places. Miss-spelled words such as "beautiful". And words that are not capitalized that need to be. Originality/C:5: To be honest the high school thing has been done to death. Enjoyment rating was brought down by the large amount of ooc-ness in this story. Sesshoumaru acts too immature. And Kagome seems like a whole new character you just gave her name to. Many people try to give these charcters the attitudes that kids in our own schools have. And you should really think about writing your own original work because those kinds of personalities don't work with Rumiko Takahashi's characters. If this weren't the Inu gang in this story and some characters you created then it could work. But keep in mind that is just my honest opinion.
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Reviewed By: shorty14090 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2004 19:31 CDT
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^_^
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Title: nice
Reviewed By: shiroi hana lover of hiei [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2004 14:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey i think u should let on of them war a balck and white fitted. plus no one wears tims no more. so u should use birdmans sneakers. sorry if this sounds..................................................bossy. i like this story. UPDATE!
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Reviewed By: Biganimefan1 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2004 13:33 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
COOOL NOT BAD
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Reviewed By: Biganimefan1 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2004 12:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH PLEASE WRITE THE STORY SINCE IT SOUNDS SOO COOL
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