| "True Feelings Get In The Way" Reviews/Comments [ 52 ] |
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Reviewed By: animeluver17 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2004 16:31 CDT
Comment/Review:
I liked it! Write more.
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Title: hmm this is annoying it wont let me review!!!
Reviewed By: Michi-Chan6 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2004 13:29 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You can't quit!I like that fanfic and I thought it had a lot of potential. I don't want you to discontinue it. I'm sad now.
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2004 11:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is your first fic so I'll try to tell you all of your problems. Don't think I'm being mean or anything, I wouldn't do that because I remember when I was writing my first story too. Style of Writing:6: Because your lines are too short and choppy. The only discriptions that we get are what they're wearing and if the story is set in Japan they wouldn't be wearing any of that to school anyway. Spelling and Grammar:5: Well there are a lot of spelling errors, such as apostrophes in the wrong places. Miss-spelled words such as "beautiful". And words that are not capitalized that need to be. Originality/C:5: To be honest the high school thing has been done to death. Enjoyment rating was brought down by the large amount of ooc-ness in this story. Sesshoumaru acts too immature. And Kagome seems like a whole new character you just gave her name to. Many people try to give these charcters the attitudes that kids in our own schools have. And you should really think about writing your own original work because those kinds of personalities don't work with Rumiko Takahashi's characters. If this weren't the Inu gang in this story and some characters you created then it could work. But keep in mind that is just my honest opinion.
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Reviewed By: shorty14090 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2004 19:31 CDT
Comment/Review:
^_^
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Title: nice
Reviewed By: shiroi hana lover of hiei [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2004 14:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey i think u should let on of them war a balck and white fitted. plus no one wears tims no more. so u should use birdmans sneakers. sorry if this sounds..................................................bossy. i like this story. UPDATE!
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Reviewed By: Biganimefan1 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2004 13:33 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
COOOL NOT BAD
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Reviewed By: Biganimefan1 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2004 12:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH PLEASE WRITE THE STORY SINCE IT SOUNDS SOO COOL
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