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Title: yaya
Reviewed By: yaya On: July 19, 2004 00:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yayaya!!!my new favorite story!!!!update asap!!!pretty please with a cherry on top??????????????
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Reviewed By: MutelyMe22 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2004 13:07 CDT
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Your story is great hope you update soon!
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Reviewed By: PJ On: July 12, 2004 02:22 CDT
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Great story so far I really like it. I noticed someone say that furry thing is not Sessy's tail well I say so what. Sessy is a bit OOC it seems so why not have him with a tail other authors write that he has a tail. Don't worry about it I think the story is great and hope you continue soon. I want to know what happens. I can totally see Inuyasha being a bit jealous about Sessy (I can't spell his whole name) having things that he doesn't. Inuyasha's whole life he has been denied things and such just because he was a hanyou. I can not see him being jealous about the title but Sessy got to know their father and had somewhat of a 'good' childhood where as Inuyasha never knew his father and his mother was killed when he was small so he didn't get a childhood and never really got 'love' until Kikyou (if you call what she gave him love) and then after Kagome set him free he got friendship and everything that goes with that I can see him not wanting to loose that and to someone that helped keep it from him to start with. *sorry for the long review I tend to babble when I like a story* Anyway I want to know what happens and if changing whatever bad thing happens will change everything I hope they are careful about things it could end up with Inuyasha/Kagome instead of Sessy/Kagome. Update soon!!!!
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness(not signed on) On: July 11, 2004 01:30 CDT
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I have to say that while the story is good, I don't think Sesshoumaru would fall for anyone so easily. It doesn't fit his personality to suddenly have feelings for someone out of the blue. And Inuyasha seems a little ooc. I don't think he would be jealous of his brother's title since he doesn't even remember his father or really seem care for that matter. And that furry thing is not Sesshoumaru's tail. It's just something he has wrapped around his shoulder. When you see him on the show or manga you'll notice that it's not connected to his back in any way. All though he does use use it as whip once, but it's not a tail. But it is a good story so far.
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Reviewed By: akuma_river [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2004 17:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dang. What a story. What a start. I have never seen a story quite like this one before. Some similarities to others. But this plot line is completely unique. I can't wait til the update. I love this story already. Keep up the excellente work.
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Reviewed By: Shinobi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2004 03:24 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very interesting. I wonder what happened in the past. Very good story so far. Sorry for the short review ^__^;;
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Title: Is left wanting more...
Reviewed By: KennaS [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2004 02:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I must first start off by telling you that this is one of the most enjoyable stories I've read in a while; its fun to see Sesshomaru in such an out of charater role and I'm looking forward to see where you're going with this. You're probably wondering about your ratings now. The "9" was because of a few spelling mistakes and transposed letters. Those should have been picked up by one of three methods. Spell check, your proofreading or your beta reader. Now, if you DON'T have a beta reader, I suggest you get one. If youre going with this story where I THINK youre going, its going to get pretty confusing very quickly! Youll need someone or something to keep your5 story straignt. You're a brave soul for attempting this and it excites me to see some one with your obvious talent attempting something that will further your skills. Rest assured, I will be following your story and rooting for you whole heartedly!Congratulations on coming up with such an original plot. You also handled the Kikyo/InuYasha situation quite well! It's a breath of fresh air to see some one make all parties seemingly happy in the end. One more thing…a warning really. The amount of sexual tension is PERFECT right now, try not to over do it or let up on it. As it stands now, the reader is expecting the mating to happen right around the next paragraph and that's the way it should be! Keep 'em waiting till the very last and make them beg you for fulfillment!
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