| "Fallen into Darkness" Reviews/Comments [ 13 ] |
Title: ahhhhhh
Reviewed By: Lunar_Storm [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2004 01:42 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
write more please i love t his story i felt so bad for her,, and y did everyone have to be a jerk god people just dont understand anymore there all mostly idiots ¬.¬ .... but ya ummmm please please update ^_^ Bethie
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Title: ....
Reviewed By: ShikonAngel10 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 10:38 CDT
Comment/Review:
me again
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Reviewed By: Inuluvher151 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 07:59 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
God Inuyasha can be such a Jerk. but i'm glad they made up after he found out she was blind. I hate how kikyo treated her just cause she didn't believe she was blind! Some people. that just makes me mad! but it's still a great story I love it keep up the good work and update soon!!!
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Title: me again...
Reviewed By: ..... [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 00:23 CDT
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.... this is sucks... by the way thanks for the tip Lavender Valentine
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2004 22:02 CDT
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Good chapter. Thank you for breaking up the paragraphs because I found it easier to read and I really enjoyed it more. The thing about college English classes is that they made us write essays analyzing metaphors in obscure poems, or the symbolism behind the color green in some boring 'classic' novel, or something stupid like that. Writing essays, which usually do have longer paragraphs, is different from writing short stories and I think you did a nice job with this latest chapter. Thanks for not taking my bitching as a flame and please update soon. You have a good story in the works and I'd like to see where you take it.
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Title: still can't see
Reviewed By: ??? On: July 13, 2004 20:33 CDT
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Can't see my reviews.... grrr
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Reviewed By: Lavender Valentine [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2004 20:28 CDT
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This is an interesting take on the 'blind Kagome' plot. I love it when authors take the time to research! I noticed you were having trouble reading your reviews. I had this same problem with my own fics until I started deleting my temporary internet files and cookies before signing in. For some reason, that did the trick. Lavender
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Title: can't see my reviws
Reviewed By: ??? On: July 11, 2004 14:18 CDT
Comment/Review:
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Reviewed By: laura beth On: July 10, 2004 23:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like your story!! I wanna know what happens so you have to keep on writing kay ~_^! The only reason I didn't give your story all 10's is because the long paragraphs are kinda confusing...but that's about it!!
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Reviewed By: Inuluvher151 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2004 20:07 CDT
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hey great story keep up the good work can't wait until you update again
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2004 20:00 CDT
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I like your story but I have one request. Each time a new person starts to speak or a new action occurs or a scene changes, a new paragraph should start. One person can have several lines of dialogue broken up within a single paragraph but when someone else starts to talk, it should be in a new paragraph of their own. It will also make it easier for your readers since the long paragraphs are sometimes difficult to read on a computer screen. I'm not trying to flame you; I just wanted to point out the proper grammar and let you know it would be easier to read that way. Thanks and please update your story soon.
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Title: ????
Reviewed By: ShikonAngel On: July 09, 2004 14:05 CDT
Comment/Review:
can't see my reviews...
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Title: ShadowStar666
Reviewed By: ShadowStar666 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2004 13:29 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is a really cool fic. I hope you update real soon!
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