| "Broken Nebula" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Title: Yo
Reviewed By: Pagasis II [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2004 14:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
Not bad. You should start on it. It sounds pretty interesting. I think I might want to read this.
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Reviewed By: your dad On: July 13, 2004 05:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
Your language is good but your storyline isn\\\\\\\'t totally original. You need to work on your names.
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Reviewed By: VegetandAru [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2004 09:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
Weeeee! Good! Well written on the whole, I'm glad you got it up but I would still advise you to change some names of stuff and to put some references in. At some points I think it would be better to lenghen some of the scentences instead of having too many short ones but not all the time. Carry on writting. Your beta reader VegetandAru.
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