| "The First Christmas" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: J. On: April 19, 2005 14:54 CDT
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didn't mean to write two, but the first wouldn't post after a while. don't know how, if possible, it could be deleted.
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Reviewed By: J. On: April 19, 2005 14:52 CDT
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The story had a good variety of words, but some of the dialogue was a bit awkward. Just can't imagine people actually talking like that. That was basically what bothered me the most.
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Reviewed By: J. On: April 19, 2005 12:28 CDT
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The story had a good variety of words, but some of the dialogue was a bit awkward. Just can't imagine people actually talking like that. That was basically the only thing that bothered me.
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