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| "Eden" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: AyameLover#? On: November 21, 2004 15:12 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay!!! That was really good!!! I haven't read a story with a young Akito before.....I thought it very interesting how you chose to portray him. This was a very original/clever idea, and you pulled it off well -- way to go!!! Keep up the good work!!!
| Reviewed By: pisces_twins, Aqua On: October 15, 2004 09:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Niamh is right, this differs immensely from the other fics on this site, and on most other sites, it truly is a gem nestled amongst poorly spelt dribblings of raving fangirls. Having said that I do in fact read those fics and usually enjoy them, but it was just refreshing to actually find something that didn't contain everyone confessing their love for eachother in the first few sentences and then kissing right away, which is usually out of character. Love doesn't always have to be physical, and it's not always acknowledged, so I think you did a great job of that here, neither of them openly admitted any strong feelings to eachother or to themselves, which I think is a good thing as it kept them in character. And I think you succeeded in trying to gradually turn his loyalty from Yukiko to Akito, oh yes and I prefer the green eyes as well ^-^. Wonderful fic! ~Aqua~
| Title: A pleasant surprise
Reviewed By: Niamh [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2004 08:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Imagine my surprise at stumbling upon this gem nestled amongst poorly spelled dribblings of raving, pre-adolescent fangirls. This was an interesting read -- and I mean that in the best possible way. You've captured Hatori's conflict beautifully, and this fic gives us a glimpse behind the Dragon's stoicism in things regarding Akito. Lovely foreshadowing as well. I think the only thing I didn't understand was your choice to have the God be directly related to the previous God (I had always assumed that one was born only after the previous one died). And it would have seemed to me that one so sickly as the God (were she female) wouldn't have been able to survive childbirth. However, this was only a fleeting thought, and I wasn't about to overthink the circumstances. It's your fic, and in things left unexplained by the manga/anime, you get to make the rules. ;) Oh, and before I forget -- I prefer Ha-san's green eyes as well. :)
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