| "Fallen Angels" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Title: Hello
Reviewed By: Neko Kurama [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2005 17:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
Just a reminder that you have a reader and someone who will read your story. I've noticed you haven't updated in a while and I thought you should. ^^ If you're having a writer's block I'd be glad to help you through it.
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Title: hi
Reviewed By: LadyKATT [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2004 20:06 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
cool Ya it is really good it is captavaing Please up date soon Bye LadyKATT
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Reviewed By: LadyKATT [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2004 19:14 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi Ya it cool so far on chapter 5 let you know when I am done LadyKATT
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Reviewed By: Koaitan Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2004 20:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hiya folks!
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Reviewed By: Koaitan Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2004 00:44 CDT
Comment/Review:
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Reviewed By: Neko Kurama [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2004 12:38 CDT
Comment/Review:
You seemed to spill on some information with haste, but that is the only bad part. I would suggest revealing the info to the readers before the others find out about it but that might be too late. And I'm starting to get a clearer idea of what this story is like, and it somehow gets more and more potential of a good story. When I first started reading, I had to force myself to go along because you were a decent writer who deserved a reader and a review, but now I find myself really wanting to read more. Violet would be my favorite character, just in case you wanted to know.
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Reviewed By: Neko Kurama [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2004 18:27 CDT
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I noticed about 3 spelling errors, but that's about it and I couldn't spell right if my life depended on it. I noticed a bit more humor in this one, actually made me chuckle at parts and that's good in any story. Good work on chapter four, this story is getting interessting, even without much of a plot. Do you have AIM or Yahoo Messenger? I'd love to chat with you sometime.
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Reviewed By: Neko Kurama [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2004 10:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmm, sorta reminds me of Darkside Blues. This story was a bit slow at first, but after you pointed out that the Earth was ruled by one government, I was somewhat intrigued to read more. Maybe the setting is something that you could include in the story's summary. The writing is good, you don't have to work on your style. The plot is still vague and that may ward off readers. And don't do the "I want [amount of reviews] or I wont make a next chapter" That makes most people just leave. But over all, I think you have set yourself up for a great story. I look forward to seeing more.
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