| "In A Cave , In Love." Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: Devilangel620 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2005 00:08 CDT
Comment/Review:
LEMON!!!!!yay!!!!but too fast for comfort.
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Title: ok
Reviewed By: Lunar_Storm [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2004 07:54 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
it was good but u made everything go way to fast kinda scared me u should of slowed it down prolonged it ^_^ im only giving addvice not baggering or trying to be mean because i know how it is to get critizized ^_^ so u did a good job but just try to make it longer and not ass fast ^_^ ok ok bye bye Bethie
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Reviewed By: houshiluver On: August 06, 2004 19:28 CDT
Comment/Review:
be more descriptive, and take more time on the lemons, dont just be like "he did this, he did that, she climaxed" make it sound like they're more involved instead of a hired whore type job... i think you should continue, but keep this in mind as you write the next chapter. keep up the good work ~Houshiluver
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