| "Aftermath: Loss and Redemption 2" Reviews/Comments [ 19 ] |
Reviewed By: Bastion [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2009 11:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
So obviously I'm slowpoking but man I like these 2 stories. Rarely do I read a story where Keitaro only gets one girl and has to face the others for his decision. Hopefully you'll finish this, it's got great potential.
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Reviewed By: Alpha Inventor [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2008 23:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good story. dont have many complaints at all. one question though, are you ever going to finish it?
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Title: Wow...
Reviewed By: Glaedr [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2007 01:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As the title says, wow...This is by far the best FanFic I've ever read(And I've read lots as I really dont have anything to do with my time). Other than I wish you would have finished it, I dont know what else to say since this is my first time ever giving a review. Your other stories are nice as well(Particularly the one with Tsuruko) but not as nice as this one. Bai, Glaedr
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Reviewed By: m-painn [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2006 16:41 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok, sorry i didnt review the other one, it was really good tho, but i am wondering for this one? how come u stopped writing? or are u? well its really good and i hope u complete, well good luck! peace, m-painn
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Reviewed By: monkey-with-wrench On: April 30, 2006 19:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I know I praised your lemon writing abilities in the first Loss & Redemption, but this is a bit much. They're starting to seem like you're putting them in for nothing but the hell of it. In the original fic it was put there as a sort of climax to the story (pun very definitely not intended), the second time was to show that even after a year they're still doing it and are still enjoying it, but that's where it should stop. We don't learn anything new in the subsequent sex scenes and I honestly feel like skipping over them, I'm not here to read that and I don't think you started this story just to write that sort of stuff.Having said that the overall story is good and you have managed to keep the plot fresh by introducing Kanako. Your portrayal of the characters only gets better and I highly enjoy seeing the other side of Kitsune. I hope you update soon, keep the good stuff coming.
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Title: HAHAHAHA
Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2006 14:34 CST
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I just read your omakes again and they are SO DAMN FUNNY!!!!!!!!! But seriously... Negi doing his entire class... and Tenchi and every one but Sasami and Washu... Ren and Takeya is normal.... but the others are a bit much... But still funny... UPDATE!!!!
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Title: Exceptional
Reviewed By: Dark Lord Tokunaga [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2006 20:45 CST
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As is my habit I will leave reviews after the completion of the fic. Also your works , both Loss and Redemption and this one are exceptional and should be on everyones favorite list and also, keep up the good work as you place 1st place as an author who is an excelent writer and ... Well you get the point... Btw placing first is a very prestigious spot out of aproximately 1000 fics is a feat within its self. I am also acking you to update sooner. Well that is all i have to say for now, I eagerly await your next update.
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Title: update please
Reviewed By: Mrff On: June 23, 2005 14:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is an interesting fanfic, I hope you will update it soon.
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Reviewed By: DB Waffles On: June 16, 2005 14:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
uh kinda creapy, its his sister! ewwwwww
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Reviewed By: Okami_Kitakazeno [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2005 17:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic; it's not only an idea that's been worked not nearly as often as you'd expect, but the symptoms of Motoko's pregnancy are eerily simmilar to what I've seen in friends. I still don't get the "pickles and ice-cream" cravings though... Anyway, keep up the good work! ~Okami Kitakazeno
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Reviewed By: Dark_Ace [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2005 18:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You need to keep writing im realy liking this fic it better than most ive read. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Death By Waffles On: February 22, 2005 13:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Finaly! I've wasted forever 4 you to update, im so happy XP i kvoe this ch and cant wait for the next
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Reviewed By: SentiNel090 On: February 09, 2005 16:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You rock! I hope this gets updated soon, because I find this storyline as captivating as LH itself... But with a mature twist for the better ^^ Keep writing, you da man! =D
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Title: As usual, excellent work =)
Reviewed By: sle3k On: November 15, 2004 13:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Again, well done. Enjoyable and erotic read. You're the best Kei/Mot fic. writer. Keep up the good work !
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Reviewed By: Death By Waffles On: November 10, 2004 23:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really hope you update soon i lve your story
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Reviewed By: Thalin On: August 13, 2004 11:32 CDT
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well done. keep up the good work cant wait to see next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Jock Angelle On: July 29, 2004 00:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read it on fanfiction.net first but the lemon adds tonnes to the story. If you're not sure where your going with the story I suggest you use Motoko's mood swings, they can make for a good story. Her self-consiousness about her weight gain could be used too. But I would love to see Naru and Keitaro be friends again but twist it so that Motoko is jealous and does something rash. Eventhough Motoko is my fav, your story lacks the Love Hina spirit because the minor charcaters seem to be left out a little, although it but just be that they weren't needed in the fist chapter. Keep it up!
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Reviewed By: Jess! On: July 27, 2004 12:57 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i discoverred your fic on fanfic.net and was greatly interested in seeying how it would turned out with a touch of lemon. i must say it's great. i love to read fics where kei and motoko end up together and making her horny like this is great (wish my girlfriend was like that ^-^). i just can't get enough of it. the first book is awsome. you made a wonderful job and i hope you'll keep it up because this second book starts in a great way. i just hope you'll not write to much lemon. just a bit from time to time would be great. aigain, congratulations and update soon!! a french moyoko fan
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Reviewed By: Shadow Megatron [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2004 08:43 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*Grinning Evilly* Ohh I liked the start indeed, Serves Naru right I rekon, anyhow I look forward to more on this at your leasure Firm believer of the K/M union the K/Shin the K/Kit and awe heack even the K/URD connection! Shadow Megatron~
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