| "Jewel Protecters" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: FoxylilRaven(not logged in) On: January 22, 2005 16:20 CST
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Raven:*sigh* please dont make the chapters one paragragh...and have two people or more speeking in one paragragh...the multaple paragraghts help with the lingth...which is ubber short...and its proper grammer to have each person has they're own Paragrapgh for speeking...less confusing...one more thing PLEASE write out words like are, why, you, ECT. and captialize names...other than that pritty good
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Reviewed By: darksilverangel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 05, 2005 16:52 CST
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i think is good so far but u just have to write chapter 5 out but u are really good at writing and maybe that i could write storys too.
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Reviewed By: foxylilraven [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2004 22:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
ur chapters r a bit short
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Reviewed By: Moon Princess On: July 31, 2004 11:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
Love it so far. Please update soon. I wonder what's it gonna be like now that Kogome is ooc in you fic? Well we can't find out unless you update so UPDATE!
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