| "The Unexpected" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: Joan R H On: January 03, 2010 08:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just a few spelling errors here and there. Otherwise, a really enjoyable read with a good storyline so far that is making me eager to read the next instalment.
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Reviewed By: RAGA On: April 24, 2009 10:53 CDT
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You need to have some serious work on your paragraphs done fore the last two chapters. Other than that, nice job.
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Reviewed By: silverwyvern On: June 12, 2005 03:52 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, I absolutely love your story. It's such a fun and pleasant read. ^___^ You have a very unique plot that is great and orginial. I can't wait for the next chapter. Please hurry!!!
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Reviewed By: Charity On: May 14, 2005 19:23 CDT
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That was hilarious. Oh, I absolutely loved it. Good going.
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Title: finally! a Ai No Kusabi that doesn't have Iason proving that loving to much hurts
Reviewed By: Seto Son On: November 29, 2004 08:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's so good to fially see some fresh material. Not to mension Iason isn't portraid as over possesive, who does love Riki but doesn't realise his actions toward his pet are doing more harm then good. In a lot of stories I find myself just wanting to strangle Iason for acting like a dick. You do a few sentences that don't seem to be compleat in thought, but besides that everything is good. Please do another chapter! I"M BEGING YOU!
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Reviewed By: Jane Silver On: November 28, 2004 18:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Now why can't there be more stories like this! Keep adding chapters or I'm going to bug you till you do.
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Title: I love Riki and puppies!
Reviewed By: Ulla Nissinen On: October 02, 2004 09:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is just wonderful story! It would have been a good idea put a dog for keeping some company to poor, bored, frustrated Riki in the anime in the first place :) I really hope that you will let this story continue, but I wouldn´t mind some sex scenes. X)
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Reviewed By: *^_^* On: August 19, 2004 21:46 CDT
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Awwwwww! This is soo cute! Continue and soon!
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Reviewed By: Kira Takenouchi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2004 11:38 CDT
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This story will appeal to readers who enjoy animals. I can envision some very amusing scenarios. You need to continue now and develop the plot, and you might also consider editing to make things flow better (I realize this is your first draft). This will help you find your "voice" for the next chapters. Do you know what I mean by voice? It's great to see another writer tackling Ai no Kusabi! Hope to see more soon! Congrats on writing and posting a great start!
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