| "Medabots: Reflections" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Title: Chapter very very good.
Reviewed By: Zoom42 On: October 10, 2012 18:51 EDT
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Or should I say very very hot. Shamelessly Innocence (one Arika daring and fearless Ikki), pure instinct. I wondered about the lack of romance (the story is told by a girl), but reading your comments I had the answer, the girl wants to be a reporter. What you type and shows about sexual relations, are mostly fantasies or exaggerations (Entertainment). If you want to know about sex, read a book of sexology |
Reviewed By: master one [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2011 06:14 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story it was great. Keep up the great work. I have noticed that you review your own fanfiction. That is rare that on author reviews their own work. It's cool! |
Title: Why Am I Only Writing This Now?
Reviewed By: Noc and NC On: April 04, 2008 16:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It seems that you haven't been getting many reviews praising you for this great piece of writing! I don't think that's acceptable! I may not know many of the characters, as a lot of them are from the third season of Medabots (something I never watched- once Medabee lost his old-school look I was unhappy), but I DO know Ikki and Arika (I too, like the Japanese spelling) and I do know that your writing of them is spot on! Arika was right in that Ikki and romance go together like salt and ice-cream, and so, this was not a romantic lemon by far- it also wasn't a silly PWP because it WAS part of a plot. This story was just a very realistic look at sex. Reporter Arika realistic, to boot, who won't let her emotions get in the way and make her think it's better then is. I just wanted to tell you that I really love how bare and truthful this segment of your main storyline is, and that people are really enjoying their smut too much if they don't see how great a read this is!
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Title: Swear to God, that was the funniest damned lemon I ever read!
Reviewed By: SD-6 On: June 29, 2005 05:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Erika! I swear! That's what happens when you read pwp all of the time... you get let down. XD
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Title: O.o
Reviewed By: Lord Archive [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2005 14:19 EST
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I know it defeats the purpose to say it's a joke, but the first lemon scene is a parody. Half the point of it was to poke fun at unrealistic plotless ficts. Guess I failed to get readers to understand that they should be laughing more than wanking. Well, can't get it right all the time. ^^; Another point is in regard to character perspective. The fict is written per Arika's thoughts and, as a reporter, she's more of a visual person than an emotional one. She's going to reference what she sees more than what she feels. She will call things for what they are. If she sees a penis, it's a penis. My lemon style is typically more visual than emotional, but I am working on making them more of the later. However, sometimes a lemon works better with visual reference clues. Those who did catch the joke of Ikki going limp and not staying hard as most Porn Without Plot put it, would miss the joke if I didn't reference it with visual references. Lord Archive, over ten years of lemon experience and whose name appears in metatags for porn sites with live nudes so they can get more hits.
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Title: Good but not great
Reviewed By: YamiYaiba [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 18:39 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was a pretty good lemon, just not the best I've ever read. It got better later into the lemon. The writing style was a bit immature, but not one of the lemony horrors that can be found around this site. I would like to see at least another chapter written/
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Title: What the hell is wrong with you?
Reviewed By: . On: November 10, 2004 13:08 EST
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Reviewed By: Williesama On: September 19, 2004 12:20 EDT
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Strange, I seem to have read it a day after its revival. I agree with The Master, although you did you many curse words, really making me think that you were not very experienced in the art of lemon. Try to be more subtle next time.
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Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2004 12:11 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story it was great. You are an artist.
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