| "Inspiration" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: Killer_Muraki [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2008 00:45 CDT
Comment/Review:
LOL Just how many Comments am I going to make? >_> Shocking...
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Reviewed By: Killer_Muraki [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2008 00:43 CDT
Comment/Review:
First things first. YAOI not YAIO! The MANY Authors Notes were really not needed. You could have added them in the story. You need loads of detail and your writing style needs some work. Just keep practicing.
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Reviewed By: Killer_Muraki [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2007 22:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Comment/Review:
Details, details, details. The boys came way too quickly and it wasn't very... hmm... I don't know.. You had a good idea, perhaps you should rewrite it some time, with much, MUCH, more detail and length. Good job.. And at the top of your page, did it say yaio? It's yaoi.
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Reviewed By: Aynjal [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2007 11:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Comment/Review:
I really liked your story. I think that you should be more discriptive. YOu should also leave the A/N's out of the story. By reading through the story people should be able to figure out what has happened, or you should included that as part of your story. Over all very good job for your first time writing. :) I look forward to reading more of your fanfics.
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Reviewed By: Water Sprite [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2005 14:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is really, very good... espescially for a first lemon (of course, I'm not exactly one to talk, my lemons don't get very far-- at all). I'm just going to suggest one itty-bitty thing, perhaps more details? Anywho, I really liked it, please continue to write!
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Reviewed By: candylady123 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2004 19:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
Pretty good for your first one just try to get more discriptive way to go!
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Title: ^__^
Reviewed By: Jin_Hiei [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2004 13:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oi good job for your first time ^__^ good luck with writng more fics! XD
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