| "Mysteries Unfolded" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Title: rawrz woman!!!
Reviewed By: fallen_tenshi_ [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2005 17:57 CDT
Comment/Review:
lol. update please! =] this is a really good fic, by the way, im 5'3 too. lol. =]
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Reviewed By: Naako [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2005 02:34 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH MY GOSH YOU JUST HAV TO UPDATE oh and by the way I'm 5'3 as well so yeah, awsome story keep it up.
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Reviewed By: Reikka_Shinen [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2005 17:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
Well I didn't read the whole thing, only the first chapter, so I'll give you a review on what I did read. Okay, the way you right seems amateurish. Sorry but that is my opinion. Like how all of a sudden she feels dizzy and she passes out, and coincidentally hiei and Kurama walked up behind her as soon as she fell. And how the cut in her leg got deeper the next day. It might get infected but not deeper. And how she already meets the gang in the first chapter, without really anything going on before that. I don't even really know who this character is and already the plot is starting to happen! I'm sorry to be so harsh, but personally I didn't think it was very good so I only read the first chapter. I know all the other reviews said they like it, but if you saw all my other reviews then you would know that I always review and tell people what they need to work on instead of just saying that I liked or didn't like it. I have a reputation around this site that I always review what I read and speak my mind no matter how harsh it may be. Well enough about me, more about your fanfic. You also need to watch your spelling and grammer.I just really think that you should slow the story down a bit and tell us more about the character( even though it's a self insertion.) oh and do you have any idea what a Mary-Sue is, cause I've heard it alot and I have no idea what it means. Feel free to email me and tell me what you think about what I said,and would you tell me what a Mary-Sue is. ^_^ . |
Reviewed By: IcedFireRose [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2004 11:48 CDT
Comment/Review:
R (that's me): OMG!!!/ Hiei: what now, lose your mind again?/ R: *shakes her head*/ Hiei: well speak already!/R: *gets a glazed over look and then faints/ Hiei: not again *picks her up*/ R: *opens one eye, winks and then "faints" again*/ Hiei: *realizes she's faking and drops her* baka/ R: what girl can help herself around you? btw...THANKS for that chappie.....very very yummy!/ Hiei: *notices Rose moving towards him and takes off*/ R: Hiei! ah well, maybe next time. KEEP UPDATING!!!! @};---- ~Rosey
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Reviewed By: kagayaku rei tsuki [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2004 05:25 CDT
Comment/Review:
iluv the story and all.... but i am so horny from reading it..... MAN THIS SUCKS!!!! *thinks hentai thoughts* *growl* YOU DID THIS TO ME!!!!!!! PLZ UPDATES SOONS!!
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Reviewed By: Shiny Lights [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2004 22:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
me: o.o/ Hiei: what is it now?/ me: *points to fic*/ Hiei: O_O you're a hentai, you know that?/ me: she... used SLANG... IT'S A MIRACLE!!! I ACTUALLY UNDERSTOOD IT! it wasn't all frillied up, either. JUST HARD CORE SEX!!! WITH HIEI!!! IT CAN'T GET ANY BETTER THAN THIS! AND THERE'LL BE MORE TOO!!! YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA*passes out*/ Hiei: Great. She overloaded.. and now i bet she's spoiled too...
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Title: Reaction
Reviewed By: Cainara [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2004 21:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hey.. lol yea thanks for telling me that ill make like....uuhhh...i dont know! but more than one. Yusuke: Oh yea...so smooth... Cainara: YUSUKE SHUT UP! yusuke: mmmmm...no cainara: **smacks yusuke upside head** yusuke: ooowww...fine... cainara: ok like i said...thanks and yea lemons will do
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Title: Mysteries Unfolded
Reviewed By: Icey Queen10 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2004 21:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update soon plz!
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Reviewed By: Shiny Lights [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2004 21:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
Cool, i'm actually NOT a demon for once! I'm SPECIAL!/ Hiei: You mean "special-ed"?/ me: -_-# no Hiei, I do NOT mean special-ed. No more hanging out with my cousin./ Hiei: Hn./ me: anyways, UPDATE SOON!!! and make sure there are PLENTY of lemons... i don't like how there's usually only one..../ Hiei: Hentai./ me: WANNA MAKE SOMETHING OF IT?/ Hiei: You're a waste of my time./ me: then why are you still here?/ Hiei: ....../ me; exactly. ^^ I WIN!
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