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Reviewed By: darksquire(not logged in) On: January 15, 2007 14:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Overall this is pretty good. However, you keep writing things like more faster, more _____er. That is not gramatically correct. You shouldn't say something is more faster. Just say it is faster. But yeah... otherwise, as I said this was pretty good.
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Reviewed By: hanyou_gurl004 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2005 00:59 CDT
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Hey!! It's me again. I took your advice and read this for my little "problem." Since I've given a pretty detailed analysis on the lemons..I just wanted to leave a simple review. You truly are the "God of Lemons" and I commend you!! Can't wait to talk to ya later!! ~Corinthia
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Reviewed By: hanyou_gurl004 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2005 10:59 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW!! I must say that these were the hottest one-shots I've read, especially the one with Kanna! Your writing style is amazing and your attention to detail is mind numbing. I wish other authors made their stories as detailed as yours. I heard about this from another fic I was reading (I don't remember the name), and it makes me want to read your actual stories. I must say that I was a bit surprised to find out that you're a guy, I thought females were the predominant authors of fanfiction. In fact, I think you're the first male fanfiction writer I've read. Superb job!! The only piece of criticism is I noticed a few gramatical errors, but compared to other authors I've read, they were miniscule. Keep up the amazing work!!!
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Reviewed By: Lucient , who is never signed in On: July 08, 2005 14:42 CDT
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Wow... the first sin, in lover's eyes wasn't really all that sinful, was it? That was one of the hottest lemons I've ever read. The description was... hmm... I shouldn't tell on myself, should I? ;) I like the way the story was written. It sounded like my best friend was narrorating the tale, until the sex scene when it went between the lovers in themselves and omnipotent form. Wonderful. :)
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Reviewed By: fire godess On: June 08, 2005 12:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Zelix you are th god of lemons!! Can you write another lemon of Inu-Kag??
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Title: Lovin it!
Reviewed By: diablos42069 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2005 04:08 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey Zelix. You asked me to read and review your story in the review you gave me for Demonic Demons, and you just flattered me so much, I had to read it lol. I'm glad I did. What an awesome one-shot! Inu yasha and Kanna .... I've thought of some pretty random parrings but that is by far the most random and yet awesome parring. Inu yasha and Kanna would look to cute together! The lemon kicked ass! You have quite a tallent. I can't read anymore right now but I will definatly read more of your work when I have the chance. Hey maybe we can talk sometime... I bet we could come up with some good ideas. My E-mail is Diablos42069666@aol.com
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Reviewed By: sunshine161820 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2004 18:27 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i just read the "first sin" and it was GREAT i really loved it!!!! keep on writin!!!!! : )
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Title: YAY
Reviewed By: Crazy_Green [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2004 00:28 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great stories, and good plot. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2004 15:44 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oOoOo!!! That was just GREAT! Very very delicious sin indeed. The lemon was just HOT! Very very very well done. It's just amazing how well you do with those. lol I for one would like to see more of this in a sequel. Making Kagome blind was very original...I've never read something like it before. And it wasn't even a bad idea because she could still rely well on sense and touch. And that she was having visions of him during...activities...was brilliant! I applaud you on this over all I believe. How they met was adorable too. Didn't mind the lack of dialogue one bit. The fact that Inuyasha couldn't talk I think allowed him to better follow his instincts. And I gotta ask, what made you come up with pairing a blind Kagome and an Inuyasha who couldn't talk? Whatever the reason be, it was definitely a very enjoyable fic and thank you VERY MUCH because I've been dieing to read more of your writing. And you must've been dead tired too! lol. And if there IS a sequel, I have what might be a great idea that would let Inuyasha and Kagome live happily ever after. hehe. Anyways, excellent job as always and thanks again.
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Reviewed By: jodibetz On: September 07, 2004 11:11 CDT
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I think its a good idea, I like one-shots. You said we can request right??? How about an Inu-Kag? pleasepleasepleasepleaseplease!!!!
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Reviewed By: request On: August 29, 2004 23:12 CDT
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Hello there i would like to make a request for a lemon please lol i wanna read a super lemon on kag/inu or maybe a inu/kag/seshy yeah yeah yeah i know its original and all but i love readin them and i can really tell you if you write a great lemon! I have read so many storys and i know great lemons and some that are lets just say fast-dont-know-what-the-fuck-there-talkin-about lemons! So if you could write this for me ill be glad to tell you if you write really awsome lemons!! *thanx* ~The Bitchy Goth666~
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Title: More!!!
Reviewed By: ErehwonDreamer3013 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2004 13:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
to: Zelix, god of all lemons PLEASE write more lemons like this one!! Could you possibly do a Kagome/Hiten lemon or a Sess/Kag lemon or anything, just so long as its as masterfully written as the first one shot in this series!
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Title: OH MY GOD!!!
Reviewed By: ChromiumBlue3013 On: August 24, 2004 13:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dear GOD Zelix!! That has absolutely, without a doubt, the best lemon I have EVER READ. I say that with complete honesty. PLEASE, PLEASE give me MORE!!! Please keep up the AMAZING work! Mackenzie
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Reviewed By: i-am-gamer-hear-me-roar:to lazy to log in^_^;; On: August 14, 2004 22:05 CDT
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Yo! Could you write a Kagome/Hiten? I know it's weired, but I noticed there aren't many storie's about them. I read some good one's and I think it's could be pretty good. I got a scenario for ya to! Send me an e-mail if you want to hear it! It's to long for the review!^_^;; E-mail: Tomboy29114@hotmail.com
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Title: Atropa
Reviewed By: Atropa [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2004 23:21 CDT
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I better say something here as well. I just love the idea that you want write one-shotties... Grease up your little greys and keep up the good work... /Atropa-chan
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