| "She Ate Day Pill" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Title: Interesting
Reviewed By: dana_san [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2006 20:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I found this fun to read. You should update - Ranma is after all a comedy and this is cute and funny. A bit on the short side, and you could use a bit more exposition for your interactions, but its definitely got that humorous side up and running.
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Reviewed By: KyoKyo866 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2004 18:08 CDT
Comment/Review:
the story was good.. but i have an idea.. Ranma sprays royga with cold water and akne finds out his secret..[insert evil smile here]
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Reviewed By: an author On: August 13, 2004 01:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
ok the first chapter was good. now your consecutive chapters SUCK. you are writing this like you are reading me the story in person. putting in your own comments as if i am a child. GO READ A BOOK of regular fiction. look at how it is written. i suggest something like dragonlance, or forgotten realms or harry potter, or star trek, or any other number of good pieces of fiction out there. cause this isn't how it should be written. hell take a look at the fic RANKO'S MAD AS HELL!!! that is a good example. another good example would be THE MELTING PROCESS. these are just some examples of how a piece of fiction should be written. take your time and please re-write this story. it is a good idea but frankly the actual story sucks.
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Reviewed By: an author On: August 07, 2004 02:03 CDT
Comment/Review:
interesting take on the story of ranma. but question when does this take place? i mean does it take place right after that part of the manga or some time in the future? just curious.
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