| "Reminiscient Eulogy" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] |
Title: hmm....
Reviewed By: fullmetalguitar [MediaMiner Member] On: December 23, 2005 05:19 CST
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Well... it was well written, I have to give you that. The whole time though, all I could think was that Dee better cover his tracks and I was going to beat the shit out of JJ. And then Dee called out Ryo's name and I knew sweet justice. ^_~ But then the whole suicide thing... *shakes head* not diggin' it. I mean, c'mon. How is Dee going to explain JJ's suicide on THEIR BED to Ryo. He's not. This leads you to the (fully logical) conclusion that he loses Ryo, and that CAN NOT HAPPEN (EVER. They can fight, but they have to end up together again). I did like your fic, I just didn't enjoy it, as my heart was screaming how wrong it was. Once again though, good job, and I don't mean for this to sound flamey *sweat drop*
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Reviewed By: Sikandra On: March 01, 2005 16:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I agree with everyone else in the fact that NeekerBreeker is WRONG. this story was great, and the ending was TOTALLY unexpected. can't say i was too heartbroken over it, either--JJ really bugs me...then again, suicide in any form, from anyone, sucks, so the ending did make me sad because of that. anyway, i think the fic was great, PLEASE don't tell me it was just a one-shot...
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Reviewed By: Carrot On: February 14, 2005 14:53 CST
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Well I liked it. Although while I don't have as burtal thoughts on the story as NeekerBreeker does I do have to say it was quite a shock that JJ killed himself, almost too much of a shock. Yet personally I liked that shock, it was something completely unexpected and made it a bit different, even if a bit too angsty for my taste, from the everyday smut fic. I mean though this review may seem harsh I'm an everday reader and as most everyday fanfiction readers to I have my bias to drag along with me. I personally wouldn't want Dee to ever ever have sex with JJ, even if I am a huge JJ fan. So that right off made me a bit against your fic. Then going back to the fact that I'm a JJ fan, obviously as a fan I don't want him dead. XD Plus let's throw in the fact that I wish he had almost killed himself but somehow Drake shows up and and they make woopy. Well you can see that I wouldn't want him dead in that case. XD So given that amount of bais to begin with I think it's pretty damn cool that I liked your story anyway. And even if it is a bit AU, I mean I don't think it really needed that lable. Given how crazy JJ is about Dee for all we know he could have made them up being lovers in his head and really thinks they were at one time. XD Anyway! Great fic. I loved it.
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Title: oops heh, forgot to score ya lol
Reviewed By: kaitio [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2004 01:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
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Reviewed By: kaitio [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2004 01:48 CST
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Okay....First off Neeker Beeker has no concept of FANFIC so don't let that bother you. i loved the story and i am begging you....PLEASE WRITE MORE!! i want to know how Ryo will feel when he finds out jj killed himself in Dee and Ryos apartment. @_@
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Reviewed By: Kawaii Jade On: September 26, 2004 11:09 CDT
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I agree with Firgods7. Don't worry about it. I loved the lemon but I would have to say why did JJ have to kill himself. Maybe if you wanted to have him kill himself maybe somewhere other than Dee's and Ryo's apartment on their bed. But that's just my opion. It's up to u to agree or disagree. I'm hoping I'm not offending u because I don't want to offend a write becasue I am 1 myself. If u do not agree with this review I do give u the permission to delete it. Although I don't think u need my permission. ^_^ Yeah I have problems. *laughs* Hope u keep writing despite what other people say. I give u my regards to write tons of stories. ^_~ Ja'ne
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Reviewed By: firgodes7 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2004 14:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wouldn't worry about what Neeker Beeker said about your story. As I see it you can be creative if you have to write and play it by the rules that is whay placed like mediaminer exist. Writers like you get to express your self in your writings.On the other hand I really liked it and the ending was awesome I eally did not see that coming. Keep it up.
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Reviewed By: MischaPallasAthenaKitsune On: September 14, 2004 16:12 CDT
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NOOOO! OMG OMG OMG! I'm freaking crying!!!! NOOO! I mean, I love the story, but NOOO! JJ!!! *hugs the dead body* Nooo! ~MPAK
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Reviewed By: paper clip On: August 14, 2004 02:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this version better. It was more emotional. I'm glad you added Dee calling out Ryo's name instead of JJ's. That alone made the story better. I enjoyed it the first time, but this one was WAY better.
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Reviewed By: NeekerBreeker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2004 05:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
JJ is not the suicidal type. He even says this himself in the manga; I don't know how you could've missed it. The ending felt rushed and out of place - you never gave us time to realise just what happened to make JJ go over the edge like that. It felt like you were originally writing just a plain PWP, then suddenly pushed the angst button in the end. In my opinion, it didn't work to bring out any kind of emotional response from the reader. You simply didn't back it up enough. JJ is a *very* cheery and hopeful person - if you want to write him doing something this drastic, you need to work harder to make it believable. And speaking of canon, you should've also mentioned that this fic is an AU. Dee and JJ were never together in the manga, and Dee shows no interest whatsoever in JJ. It's pretty plain to me that JJ simply isn't his type. You might want to consider showing us somehow why he now thinks differently. You've put these characters in a completely different situation from the canon, and the perky JJ is now suddenly suicidal. Far-out ideas are fine, but be prepared to work harder for them. You did not work hard enough to make me believe this fic is about the same characters I know and love.
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Title: Zeros
Reviewed By: sir_integra_hellsing@hotmail.com On: August 10, 2004 03:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really loved this! It was really different, and the way it ended was so good. Who knew he was going to kill himself? All in all, I really enjoyed this story!
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