| "New Neighbour, New Feelings" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Furys Canticle [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2004 12:52 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hehehe Vegeta got caught. ^-^ Awesome please update soon.
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Title: Very Interesting
Reviewed By: Vegge's Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2004 19:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Comment/Review:
Interesting, but since it is an AU, I would like to have more background info on Vegeta. Is he a Saiya-jin or just a regular human? Also I found it odd that you gave so much info about the mother since I thought this would be more focused on Vegeta (and Bulma). Don't get me wrong. I enjoyed this first chapter. I would like to read more. It's just that when things seem out of place I have to comment. But I don't know what you have planned. Maybe there is relevance to why she cooks so well and stuff. By the way, you have some grammar and spelling mistakes, and tense problems. I would offer my services as a beta but I'm busy with all the fan fics I'm writing. Hope you update soon! I love the idea you have!
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Reviewed By: FataLFelineOfTheNight [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2004 15:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
liking it keep it going ^_^ Cat
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Title: New Neighbour, New Feelings: New Neighbour
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2004 12:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
cool story can't wait for more...maria
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