| "Desert Storm" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: GoldenSard On: December 07, 2004 15:53 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought it was great. It seemed to be a little more than porn with the comedy in it. The only thing that busted my chops is some of the lines just dragged on. I'm sorry, but the biology lessons thrown in the middle of the story absolutely ruined the sexy humor thing that i was feeling and it was way of place. The character's lines were long winded and i actually had to concentrate. I stuck to it till the end becuase it was interesting and you are an incredible writer if you can keep the flow going in a straight direction and stop interrupting it with an explination! HONESTLY! I think the true humor was behind Quatre's innocents and bewilderment and Duo feeding on it. I thought that was cute.
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Reviewed By: priscel * not logged in __salutes armitage* On: August 11, 2004 15:09 CDT
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*skims reviews* I think you handled that pretty well (^_^) your description of this particular fic was exactly what I thought, to quote 'sex for sex sake'. I didn't think about or feel that a gay person would take offense to them both being 'gay' and wanting to have sex. Duo said he's bi but the point that gave this fic more content then just being smut was the little play between the two of them wanting eachother from the get go and not sure of how to approach the other. Regardless of sexual orientation that particular theme happens a lot, a mutual interest in one another not just the sex part. And sex seems to be a major umm focus/objective/thought of some male teens. It seemed logical in a 'sex' oriented kind of way *snickers shutting up now* It was well written and *snickers when she thinks back to A/N at the being and duo's comment about chicken, then the the five gates of hell* very informative *evil smirk* I was surprised that Duo didn't used all 5 rings to his advantage but I guess that would be boarding on torture (^_^)
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Reviewed By: armitage43 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2004 07:02 CDT
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Dark Cloud... Thanks for your honest oppinion. However this fic was meant to be just sex for sex sake. I forgot to mention in my authors notes that it was written for a pwp fic competition for the art of using sex toys hosted by Shenlong at... http://www.gundam-wing-diaries.150m.com Regards Ryouga (aka armitage43)
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Reviewed By: dark cloud On: August 10, 2004 17:29 CDT
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You are obviously a talented writer, but unfortunately your story lacked any substance other than smut. You should really use your talent for giving your readers a more interesting reading experience. How many stories have we read about the GW boys having sex? It's the same old same old, nothing new there. Come up with something a bit more interesting, a real reason why they're being intimate. I find it rather insulting to gay people to write about them haveing sex because they find another gay person. Just something to think about.
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Reviewed By: Kix [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2004 16:32 CDT
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I love Duo and Quatre..they're soo cute togeather.. Thankyou !!!
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