Title: Erm.. My Review.
Reviewed By: lDragen [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2004 14:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Style of Writing: This was okay, but it really needs improvement. Spelling & Grammar: Gah, your grammar and spelling were horrible. Thats what ruined most of the story. I doubt your going to get any good reviews with that nasty grammar. Originality/Creativity: I got to give it to you, this was really creative. Never seen any ideas like this, maybe if you had written it better I would of enjoyed it. Enjoyment Factor: I couldn't enjoy this much because of how you wrote it and with all the mistakes! It was so horrible! You really need to revise every chapter! Well, atleast your story made me laugh some... Overall Rating: Overall, I did laugh throughout the fiction, but I did make faces at how it was written and the horrible grammar. It was really hard for me to read, it confused me. Maybe if you wrote this out in a more appropriate way, I could of enjoyed it. Thats what fanfictions are for thought. Improving your writing skills and letting other readers enjoy it. I thought it was pretty disgusting how you made Rishid think in this. You totally made him a disgrace. Well, don't let this review discourage you. You still have time to improve. If you ever need a beta reader, you can e-mail me chapters and I'll rewrite them for you. Well, don't bash me just because I gave you a constructive critiscm review. Well, I'm out.
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