| "How we came to be" Reviews/Comments [ 25 ] |
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Reviewed By: Kanade [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2007 01:05 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Fantastic fanfic! Really love what you've done with the beybladers! ^^ By the way: My grammar isnt perfect, but not bad either... and i can read... XD... so if you still need some beta's? (A) Just mail me.
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Title: YAY YAY YAY!
Reviewed By: Bio Uotani [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2007 19:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG OMG OMG! YAY YAY YAY! I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH! I LOVE IT! AND GO WITH THE MATURE ONE SHOT! PLEASE! I LOVE THIS SO MUCH! There was one part um "When I woke up and can't get back to sleep" should be "when I wake up and I can't get back to sleep" or something like that. But thanks for the awesome fic, can't wait till the next chapter!
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Title: omg
Reviewed By: horsesrocketh [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2007 14:42 CST
Comment/Review:
sorry i didnt review the last chappie. but your story is so....wonderful....like...i cant explain it. i love it. and youve got to keep going!
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Title: YAY!
Reviewed By: Bio Uotani [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2007 20:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY! True love concures all! Why are we so forgiving of those we love? It's like they have a magic curse over us that makes us overly forgiving. But anyway it was totally awesome but there was one spelling mistake near the top. I can't wait for the next chapter!
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Title: I LOVE YOU!
Reviewed By: Bio Uotani [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2007 18:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! I LOVE YOU SO MUCH! In the healthy best friend fan girl kindda way, not the creepy lezbo stalker kindda way. But you writting is so deep! I love it I love it I love it! You are the best writter in the world! OMG! I have never read such genous! MORE!
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Title: MORE!
Reviewed By: Bio Uotani [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2006 18:10 CST
Comment/Review:
PLEASE WRITE MORE! DIEING FOR MORE!
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Title: HURRY!
Reviewed By: Bio Uotani [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2006 19:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WRITE DARN YOU WRITE! HURRY! I HAVE TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS! PPPPPLLLLLLEEEEEAAAAAASSSSSSEEEEEEESSSSSS! Oh, and can this please end in a nice sex scene? Please!
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Title: yo
Reviewed By: horsesrocketh [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2006 18:16 CST
Comment/Review:
im confused...is she being paired wit kai or rei? because i like the kaixfaith thing.:b and you must continue
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Title: : )
Reviewed By: horsesrocketh [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2006 21:17 CST
Comment/Review:
awesome.....simply awesome! you did great on the point of view thing! and dont kill him!!!!!!please. and you absolutly MUST continue
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Title: yo
Reviewed By: horsesrocketh [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2006 16:32 CST
Comment/Review:
youve gotta continue this story! and dont kill him
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Title: Interesting..
Reviewed By: Whatsername [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2006 05:28 CDT
Comment/Review:
This was really odd ending of the secon chap. Kai, dead?? It really doesn't make sense at all.. But I like the story, and your way of writing, though I sometimes thing that you move forward a bit fast. I think I read your fist part of this story some time ago, when you first introduces Faith, but if I hadn't, I would probaably have a bit more difficulties to understand this fic. Anyways, good keep it up! I'd be really glad if you would like to check out my fics too and give me an oppinion :) Greetings// Whatsername
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Title: FFRG-chatper 1
Reviewed By: Kellen [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2005 14:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
Thanks for submitting to the FFRG. Let me preface this by saying that I really am not well-versed in the Beyblade universe, so I can't comment on characterization or anything of that nature. I wanted, however, to comment on the grammar in this short first chapter. You have some problems with paragraph breaks and punctuation regarding speaking. Many, many fic writers have the same problem: each time a different character speaks, there should be a paragraph break. Your title should be capitalized. The fic has a rough, abrupt start; you really need a little more description, especially in the beginning of the chapter. I hope that you can take this plot in new directions; it's one that has been overused before. You have a good start, but it does need work. I'd suggest working with a beta reader in regards to your grammar (ie, the paragraph breaks and the run on sentences I noticed), and adding description to the chapter. In order to deal with as heavy a subject as an addiction, you really need to get deeper into the characters and story. Don't just scratch the surface, especially in dealing with a subject like addiction. Again, thank you for submitting, and I look forward to seeing more from you. Cheers,Kellen
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Reviewed By: snake eyez [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2004 15:54 CST
Comment/Review:
dude that was good but it's sad kai dies makes me cry it was all good but i'am NOT a Max/Oliver i just don't see them together but i loved your fic
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Reviewed By: Naomike On: September 14, 2004 14:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
To say it like this : B-E-A-UTIFUL!!!!!!! That's the way I like it
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Title: WHAT?
Reviewed By: Me On: August 22, 2004 21:46 CDT
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Dead? Dead, kai, dead. No...nope...can't be...*cries* Seriously...I am. It doesn't take much but...wow.
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