| "Errant Exile" Reviews/Comments [ 20 ] |
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2005 12:04 CST
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Finally finished reading all the chapters available. I felt so bad for Goten...it's how I would have imagined how he would have acted. Well, well, a word from the Eldest...can't wait to see the next chapter and see what he has to say to Khri.
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2005 16:22 CST
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Aesthetics? Piccolo is certainly in denial. This is just too cute.
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2005 11:09 CST
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Just finished Chapter 7 and I love how you were able to realistically get into Piccolo's mind. Piccolo is one of the hardest characters to keep in character well and you had accomplished it. I'm so enthusiastic about reading this fic (haven't felt that way in a while).
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 15:22 CST
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Just had to leave another review. I loved the comment when Khri asked "will a bomb explode if he opens the doorr?" I laughed really hard at that. This really is a great fic and I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of it.
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Title: I am so going to keep up with this fic
Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 10:41 CST
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I have seen you're fic lingering here and at ff.net and I decided to finally read it. Since I've only read the first two chapters, it'll take me a bit to actually get into the real plot of the fic (I see there a lot of chapters so it'll take some time for me to read it). To be honest, in fics involving OCs, I tend to get bored if the first chapter starts with the description of the OC and have no interaction with the canon characters in any form. But I decided to keep reading into chapter 2, and now I'm interested in knowing where it will go. I like that you do seem to have an actual plot and not writing for the sake of saying "I wrote a fic." As for the technical aspects, your spelling and grammar is great though there were a couple of mistakes (nothing too obvious). You describe the scenes thoroughly and how the characters react in conversation. All these are aspects of a great writer (and at times aspects you don't find in mnay fics now-a-days). Keep up the good work.
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