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Reviewed By: wyvern_girl [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2008 02:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, Khri. Don't know if you'll know me from my other aliases, but I finally made it all the way through this story, and it's as good or better than I expected. The characterization is great (even on Piccolo and Vegeta, who are really hard to nail). You're a very patient author, too, which counts for a lot, I think - you're not in a rush to get things finished. Rather, you take your time and let the story happen at its own pace. Thanks so much for posting this, and I can't wait to see what happens next.
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Title: Excellent fic!
Reviewed By: Trynia Merin On: November 18, 2007 00:44 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've spent all afternoon and evening reading this awesome fiction and I'm hungry for more. Khri is one of the most three dimensional and fascinating OC's I've read in DBZ fanfiction. The Darkfire that she uses as opposed to ki is refreshing. I like seeing someone using a different technique that is just as good as ki, if not as effective. I also like how you mention Vegeta's past as an interstellar traveler who is aware of other races and has a connection to the Leonids. Khri and Piccolo's relationship is progressing at a believable rate, and I love the common things they share. I will definately read more of this when you update!
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Title: Long Wait
Reviewed By: EternalTwylight [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2007 19:43 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woohoo, finally another exciting chapter, I've been hoping to get an email notice for an update. I've enjoyed this story for a long time now and I'm very eager if not patient to get the next installment. I enjoy your writing style. The intereacts between the characters is belivable and every ic. Also love the pics that go with it. hehe.... *shudders* I feel for Khri having to sit there and be cut into, I think I would have gone even more batty with the idea of some kind of worm inside me... ugh. LOL female weapons, oh boy, that's gonna be a fun area to explore. Oh yes, just what "female wiles" did Khri use on Vegeta? Hope your muse is more inspired for the next chapter. Much love and happy writing.
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Reviewed By: catbeastaisha [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2006 21:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, your picture "Mad Season" stuck out to me so I decided to see what had inspired it. I was pleasantly surprised to find a very well written fan fiction involving not only my favorite DBZ characters BUT a new character that I've grown to love. Khri isn't over powered, as many others tend to be, and has such a unique ability. Her personality is interesting and the interaction with Piccolo is very much amusing and enjoyable. Thank you very much for your wonderful work and please continue to write, Muse willing. ~Catbeastaisha
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Reviewed By: Antwonette On: July 05, 2006 21:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, so you probably don't remember me, but HEY! It's me Antwone! Yeah so that was about a thousand years ago and it took me a thousand more years to find you but I DID and wow. Four amazing chapters to read. The depth and detail in which you use to create a story that is so.. brilliant, and creative. So many people would kill to have talent like your's. Good grief, I know I would. You're amazing. Your writing skills are inexplainable, and you have the power to captivate anyone. Hell, I am. I've been looking for your story forever. And now that I found it, I'm not disappointed. Not in the least. And I never will be. You seriously have phenomenal talent. Wonderful job.
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Reviewed By: Corvigryph On: July 05, 2006 14:58 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hello! I just want to say that I really enjoyed Bent! Definately worth waiting for, because let's face it, that stubborn namek is hard to write! (especially in this particular chapter ;) ) Which is why I stick to comics.... Now I have the urge to do angsty fanart with Jhonen Vasquez style craziness. :P
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Reviewed By: Lindsey On: May 04, 2006 23:02 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I love this fanfic. I really, really want to know what happens next. And personally, I think you owe me that. I lost two hours of much-needed sleep in order to read this. It was too addicting to tear myself away. Update.
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Reviewed By: strdragon (not signed in) On: April 13, 2006 00:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have created a story that is engaging and has good depth. Your original character is very interesting. I look forward to your next twist of the story. p.s. Your art work for the story is wonderful. :o)
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Title: Very good!
Reviewed By: Silver Lady Crazy [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2006 13:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Finally I had time enough to read Errant Exile. I just finished chapter 6, and I´m enjoying it, by now. I haven´t enjoyed a good, long adventure fic like this in decades! Well-written, and the character is well-developed, too. Just a few spell stuff (chi instead of ki?) and a little complaint: it´s so complicated making reviews in mminer! No wonder we receive so few.
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Reviewed By: Katey S On: July 20, 2005 11:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, I so love the story, very orignal! I have been waiting for the last month for a new chapter, everyday i get online and check if you have update yet. I mean, you can't just leave us hanging here, thats mean....:( I just can't wait to find out what she is going to do now that she is not the last, will she warm up to Piccolo or will she stay with the last of her kind....or will they even talk to each other because of her title now. Please write more soon, dieing to know what happens next
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Reviewed By: ilex9 On: June 12, 2005 03:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice job. I enjoyed reading this. Piccolo is my favorite and I think you did justice to his character. I liked the addition of the "Tomahawk" bike and I think I'm still cracking up at the elevator in the hotel. :D
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Reviewed By: Skyshadow On: June 02, 2005 09:54 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I'm an italian girl.^^ I did'nt understand all the details,but...... I CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^o^ GO,KHRY!MAKE PICCOLO GO KRAZY!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Evanscentstoolazytosignin On: April 27, 2005 02:06 CDT
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...wow. And it took me this long to read your story. I'm a goddamned idiot. This was fantastic! Woohoo! I'm really looking forward to reading more of this! Curious, though. The battle has already come and gone. Will there be more baddies for Piccolo and Khri to tango with? Or will it be the tournament that will leave us hanging? You do good battle scenes and have characterized Piccolo very well. I also liked how you fit all this in the timeline. Good, good. I'll bug you more later! -Keely
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Title: cheese
Reviewed By: animegrrrl On: February 26, 2005 14:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i'm addicted! i need to know what happens next! thank you for updating on a semi-regular basis. i don't remember if i've reviewing this story b/f or not, but i just wanted to say that i like your leonid character, she's a strong woman, not one of those mary sue's. the interaction b/w her and piccolo is rather natural. i also liked your artwork. you have your own style that isn't dbz-ish, yet you draw the characters well. you color beautifully as well. ^^ i think i reviewing the one where piccolo is standing underneath the stars w/his turban off on deviantart actually...
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Reviewed By: Rose of Vegeta On: February 16, 2005 12:53 CST
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*Sniffles* Wow that was so sad and touching. You really did a good job in portraying Khri in a non-Mary-Sueish way. I congradulate you on that. Right now I just want to cry for Khri. I'm also rooting for Piccolo...Piccolo has started to become one of my favorite characters because of you. Can't wait to read more from you. On the technical side, your grammar and spelling are very good and I didn't see any glaring mistakes...I'm sure you proofread your work very well. Keep up the great job.
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