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Reviewed By: Corvigryph On: July 05, 2006 14:58 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hello! I just want to say that I really enjoyed Bent! Definately worth waiting for, because let's face it, that stubborn namek is hard to write! (especially in this particular chapter ;) ) Which is why I stick to comics.... Now I have the urge to do angsty fanart with Jhonen Vasquez style craziness. :P
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Reviewed By: Lindsey On: May 04, 2006 23:02 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I love this fanfic. I really, really want to know what happens next. And personally, I think you owe me that. I lost two hours of much-needed sleep in order to read this. It was too addicting to tear myself away. Update.
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Reviewed By: strdragon (not signed in) On: April 13, 2006 00:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have created a story that is engaging and has good depth. Your original character is very interesting. I look forward to your next twist of the story. p.s. Your art work for the story is wonderful. :o)
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Title: Very good!
Reviewed By: Silver Lady Crazy [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2006 13:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Finally I had time enough to read Errant Exile. I just finished chapter 6, and I´m enjoying it, by now. I haven´t enjoyed a good, long adventure fic like this in decades! Well-written, and the character is well-developed, too. Just a few spell stuff (chi instead of ki?) and a little complaint: it´s so complicated making reviews in mminer! No wonder we receive so few.
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Reviewed By: Katey S On: July 20, 2005 11:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, I so love the story, very orignal! I have been waiting for the last month for a new chapter, everyday i get online and check if you have update yet. I mean, you can't just leave us hanging here, thats mean....:( I just can't wait to find out what she is going to do now that she is not the last, will she warm up to Piccolo or will she stay with the last of her kind....or will they even talk to each other because of her title now. Please write more soon, dieing to know what happens next
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Reviewed By: ilex9 On: June 12, 2005 03:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice job. I enjoyed reading this. Piccolo is my favorite and I think you did justice to his character. I liked the addition of the "Tomahawk" bike and I think I'm still cracking up at the elevator in the hotel. :D
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Reviewed By: Skyshadow On: June 02, 2005 09:54 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I'm an italian girl.^^ I did'nt understand all the details,but...... I CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^o^ GO,KHRY!MAKE PICCOLO GO KRAZY!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Evanscentstoolazytosignin On: April 27, 2005 02:06 CDT
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...wow. And it took me this long to read your story. I'm a goddamned idiot. This was fantastic! Woohoo! I'm really looking forward to reading more of this! Curious, though. The battle has already come and gone. Will there be more baddies for Piccolo and Khri to tango with? Or will it be the tournament that will leave us hanging? You do good battle scenes and have characterized Piccolo very well. I also liked how you fit all this in the timeline. Good, good. I'll bug you more later! -Keely
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Title: cheese
Reviewed By: animegrrrl On: February 26, 2005 14:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i'm addicted! i need to know what happens next! thank you for updating on a semi-regular basis. i don't remember if i've reviewing this story b/f or not, but i just wanted to say that i like your leonid character, she's a strong woman, not one of those mary sue's. the interaction b/w her and piccolo is rather natural. i also liked your artwork. you have your own style that isn't dbz-ish, yet you draw the characters well. you color beautifully as well. ^^ i think i reviewing the one where piccolo is standing underneath the stars w/his turban off on deviantart actually...
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Reviewed By: Rose of Vegeta On: February 16, 2005 12:53 CST
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*Sniffles* Wow that was so sad and touching. You really did a good job in portraying Khri in a non-Mary-Sueish way. I congradulate you on that. Right now I just want to cry for Khri. I'm also rooting for Piccolo...Piccolo has started to become one of my favorite characters because of you. Can't wait to read more from you. On the technical side, your grammar and spelling are very good and I didn't see any glaring mistakes...I'm sure you proofread your work very well. Keep up the great job.
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2005 12:04 CST
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Finally finished reading all the chapters available. I felt so bad for Goten...it's how I would have imagined how he would have acted. Well, well, a word from the Eldest...can't wait to see the next chapter and see what he has to say to Khri.
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2005 16:22 CST
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Aesthetics? Piccolo is certainly in denial. This is just too cute.
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2005 11:09 CST
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Just finished Chapter 7 and I love how you were able to realistically get into Piccolo's mind. Piccolo is one of the hardest characters to keep in character well and you had accomplished it. I'm so enthusiastic about reading this fic (haven't felt that way in a while).
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Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 15:22 CST
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Just had to leave another review. I loved the comment when Khri asked "will a bomb explode if he opens the doorr?" I laughed really hard at that. This really is a great fic and I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of it.
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Title: I am so going to keep up with this fic
Reviewed By: roseofvegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 10:41 CST
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I have seen you're fic lingering here and at ff.net and I decided to finally read it. Since I've only read the first two chapters, it'll take me a bit to actually get into the real plot of the fic (I see there a lot of chapters so it'll take some time for me to read it). To be honest, in fics involving OCs, I tend to get bored if the first chapter starts with the description of the OC and have no interaction with the canon characters in any form. But I decided to keep reading into chapter 2, and now I'm interested in knowing where it will go. I like that you do seem to have an actual plot and not writing for the sake of saying "I wrote a fic." As for the technical aspects, your spelling and grammar is great though there were a couple of mistakes (nothing too obvious). You describe the scenes thoroughly and how the characters react in conversation. All these are aspects of a great writer (and at times aspects you don't find in mnay fics now-a-days). Keep up the good work.
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