| "Lonely hanyou" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] |
Reviewed By: Ancient Spirit 123445 On: December 19, 2009 20:58 CST
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It's alright but you have a bunch of errors. It's okay.....I guess but you need more foreplay. A lot more. You make it too quick and not enough to enjoy. I don't think you are any good at lemons.
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Reviewed By: Yashie_And_Kags_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2008 20:30 CDT
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You Said Not To Flame, But Come On. Please Don't Write Anymore Stories, Because Frankly My Dear... You Suck.
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Reviewed By: jfandres On: September 15, 2005 18:46 CDT
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Get a beta reader to check your spelling!! Tends to turn people off... Ahem... Fely
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Reviewed By: haahhaaah On: June 28, 2005 20:11 CDT
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This is a good story, but I think your writing could be greatly improved. But this is still a good story, keep going.
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Title: Lonely hanyou
Reviewed By: Kagome_Inuyasha_Sesshomaru [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2005 17:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
write more I really would like to know what koga's reaction will be.
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Reviewed By: InuYasha's Bitch On: May 13, 2005 03:08 CDT
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it was cute, though a bit rushed. There's definate room for improvement, but it's good for a second try. Keep going with your writing, you've got definate talent.
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Reviewed By: Darkness Kitsune [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2004 19:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
can i be in the story? plz plz plz! i wanna be with MY Kouga-Kun! ^_^ if i can be in the story the info on the chracter i made up is in my bio thingy or whatever its called ^_^
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Reviewed By: EnchantedLadyK [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2004 21:34 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg i absolutely love this story its awsome you should make this into a longer story its really good and about what alixmm said shes right but u can spell Kilala like that its correct its also correct spelled Kirara the only difference is that Kilala is the english way of saying it and Kirara is the Japanese way becuz they dont have the letter l in their alphabet. keep up the good work your a really tanlented writter.
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Reviewed By: Biganimefan1 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2004 11:45 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AlixMM said all that I needed to say and also is this a story or one-shot cause this is very good.
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Reviewed By: ..........I'm to lazy to log in...... On: August 16, 2004 22:17 CDT
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This is a good fic, you shoud add anouther chapter.
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Reviewed By: AlixMM On: August 16, 2004 20:17 CDT
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Not too bad... but "songo" is spelled "Sango" ... "kilala" is spelled "Kirara" and "kiadae" is spelled "Kaede". I am not trying to flame just pointing this out. Also it is customary to capitalize a person's name even if it is in the middle of a sentence. Keep writing.
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