| "Concerning him" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Reviewed By: ColdHeart On: August 23, 2005 14:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh how I love the story's originality and story depth. Good job! Honestly,I cannot help but feel upset and hurt throughout the whole chapters because Hikaru never told Akira that he love him AT ALL. I was expecting it at the end but was utterly disappointed. I love how kind and patient u portray Hikaru is in this story. However, I feel that it is very unfair towards Akira because of his unrequited love. And as for the ending, once again you did a good job on that. Of course everybody will be expecting Hikaru and Akira to be together. But I would have preferred that Akira to end up being with someone else. Someone who is worthy of his love and someone who will love him just as much. Probably Ogata or someone else other than Hikaru. Because I can't stand the fact that Akira loves Hikaru soo much and Hikaru only have Sai in his heart. Akira suffered so much because of Hikaru. And why isn't Hikaru suffering for Akira. God, his little sacrifices are nothing compared to Akira's. I would have made Hikaru suffered. Make him realise that Akira is after all important to him only after, say Akira found someone else(eg.Ogata). Anyway, it's just a suggestion. Probably even too late for one. But after all, it was awesome cause it leaves an impact on me. It wounded my cold and icy heart. Do write more fanfics.
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Reviewed By: calmwind On: August 10, 2005 08:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
one of the more beautiful hikaru no go fanfics i hav e read. i love the seriousness in it and the depth of plot. i love the ending.. i love it. thank you for writing this fanfic
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Reviewed By: revolemina [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2005 04:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is one of the stories i will find very hard to forget.You've managed to bring out the personalities of Hikaru and Akira in a very different light. However, there are 2 things i must mention about the last chapter: 1) Interesting as the lemon scene is, it is too long to be in italics, or be put in a different tense from the previous. And it sounds weird when you use words like "ass cheeks", etc O.o 2) I think you should have left out "The End" and just let the other sentence remain. But that is just my personal opinion. Other than that, i love this story!! *applauds*
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Title: *Something Creative*
Reviewed By: Fuku Doll On: March 14, 2005 14:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa... I really like this fic! I've nurtured a yaoi fetish for a while now, but I this is what's gonna tip me over (this and Zelda's Soujiro x gay guy from Kenshin fic). Haha, update soon!
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Reviewed By: calmwind On: February 21, 2005 07:07 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omg!!! Moving those 2 hotties to the US will give girls and guys something to drool about!!! Talk about sharing the wealth of Japan to the world!! Actually, I kinda expected the story to go this way, since you sealed off any means by which they could live comfortably in japan and I'm happy that it happened this way - letting the both of them be happy. This is one of the most beautiful HnG fics I know. I am awaiting the Epilogue.
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Reviewed By: calmwind On: February 17, 2005 08:02 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love the depth of this plot. Though this is a very unusual take on Shindou and Touya, it is the most realistic and closest to reality for me. I love the depth and maturity of plot and I can say that I am really impressed that you can write this well even if English isn't your primary language. You can write just as well as some of my favorite fanfiction authors. Please continue updating this story. it is very good.
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Reviewed By: Yuki_1781 On: January 22, 2005 11:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I feel that this is a very good story and although I have already read it a few times, I still like it. Please continue soon, I'm eagerly waiting for your next chpt.
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Reviewed By: Ibara-hime On: December 13, 2004 14:38 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
Hm, I just wanted to tell you that this story is great, though spelling and grammar are really bad sometimes. English isn´t my mother language either, but even I notice the wrong things... Do get yourself a beta. The story is too great to let it in this state. Try on ff.net. There are a lot of helpful people. By the way, the lemon scene was reaaally HOT ^_^ But I prefer Akira as Uke 0_o Update!! Update!!!!
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Reviewed By: calmwind On: August 28, 2004 22:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is painstakingly beautiful. It tackles touya's unrequited love nicely.. which will soon be requited. Thank you and please finish this fic.
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Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2004 02:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! The way the two characters are represented is great.
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