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| "Learning my way..." Reviews/Comments [ 41 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 › » ] | Title: FFARG
Reviewed By: Broken Visage [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2005 23:27 CST
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The prologue is so sad, even though I don't really know the Inuyasha characters. You captured the feeling of such a situation pretty well. I couldn't see much in the way of spelling/grammar errors, though you should have a period after the ellipses when they're at the end of a sentence. That goes for the first chapter, as well, which I also read. If it weren't for the prologue, the first chapter would seem like the typical high school fic, but you write it well enough to pull critics of such fiction through it. I've enjoyed the prologue and chapter one and I'm a little at a loss for negatives to point out, though a little more in the way of description wouldn't hurt. It could be that I'm just overlooking them, but you have a great grasp of grammar and a good style. I do wish I could leave a bit more of a substantial critique, but it's a little hard with this piece, at least through the first chapter. Thanks for submitting to FFARG.
| Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2005 20:42 CST
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Hi! Just wanted to leave a quick review for you! I read your fic awhile back and didn't get a chance to review it then. I found your story idea to be interesting and innovative. I liked the setup and the attention to the characters overall. I found it to be quite a unique twist on what might otherwise be considered another high school fic (at least at the beginning). I did, however, feel that your story could benefit from a little more detail to alleviate a minor amount of choppiness here and there. Good job, and thanks for sharing your story!
| Title: Mockingbirdflyaway1
Reviewed By: Mockingbirdflyaway [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2005 20:34 CST
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NOTICE TO ALL REVIEWERS!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I've been diagnosed with Carpal tunnel syndrome, and for the most part, my hands are out of commission :(. I have to take a long break from typing, so I won't be able to update for the next month or so at least. Sorry guys.... ~Janna Lynn
| Reviewed By: Kyonarai(nsi) On: February 21, 2005 21:31 CST
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Another good chapter, poor keitaro, that must have been awefull for him... But, as you said, all things happen for a reason.
| Reviewed By: Kyonarai [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2005 16:19 CST
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This is a great story, but I wish you would update a little more often. But no rush, its always worth while when you do update so I'm fine. I'm actually surprized this doesn't have more reviews, it really should. Oh well, the other people don't know what they are missing!
| Reviewed By: Marva [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2005 23:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
*claps* WOOT! XD XD I like it lots! XD What's with Souten? I liked her, sort of, at first, just until her look changed when she noticed the Jewel.... *twitch* Thats set off warning bells..... -_- I dont like her at all now.... *prods evil deamoness* Nasty thing... >_< It's interesting about the tension between Shippo and her... Sounds like they've had some sort of...pervert-Shippo like relationship in the past, or at least that's what I think... ;) XD But good job, and wonderful nice long update! XD *hands you a big cookie for updating* Nice fic! XD *hopes foolish human girl doesnt get herself killed by that nasty character when she goes to talk to her* (And BTW, I Loved that last line, the one that Shippo said... XD XD XD Good job! XD XD)
| Reviewed By: inujade On: February 06, 2005 23:11 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow, i really like ur story, keep it up and update soon. very very soon.
| Reviewed By: Mockingbirdflyaway1 On: February 04, 2005 19:02 CST
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Stefini, since your not leaving an e-mail for me to contact you with, I'll leave a review on my own story :P Chapter 10 is in the hands of my editor. He's had it for a week and I'm going to start yelling at him about it now. It should be up by Sunday or Monday, mmm'kay?
| Reviewed By: Stefini On: February 04, 2005 18:44 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YOU NEED TO UPDATE I HAVE BEEN CHECKING THIS STORY FOR OVER A MONTH!!!!
| Title: I like it! XD
Reviewed By: Marva [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2005 23:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yikes! O_O0 Who's this woman? Like a water-related-animal deamon or something? ^^0 ;) I like this a lot! XD Exepte for Shippou..he's evil. -_- XP Why'd you have to make him evil? :( And how is Shippou in two places at once? Is the 'older Shippou' him after he's lived all the way to their time right now? So he's gone forward in time the hard way? ^^0 I rather hope so, cause the Younger Shippou is really sick! XP I want to tear of his tail myself, right now... ~_~ But cool fic! XD XD I just have one warning: Bewere of Mary Sue's, and Gary Stu's! ;) XD You're not terribly close to it yet...but Keitaro's getting the Miko powers, or whatever they are set off warning bells... ~_~ Watch out with that! ^_^ And one more thing...: Before you said he was 17, like three years later, and then later, when he's brushing Mariko's hair out of her face and looking at everyones auras (I think), then he says it's only been 7 months... >_< Pick a time! ^_~ Rocky cool fic though! XD XD Love it! *waits for updates and grins*
amp;! | Reviewed By: Zelix [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2005 07:57 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've always wondered what this fic was all aboút, since the idea sounded so similar to one of my own stories, "Time Soul Exodus"... though the ideas and characters are not the same, the basic idea is... how fascinating, would you like to compare? My two fics about a similar subject like this one are: "Loneliness of the Free Wind": One-shot "Time Soul Exodus": Sequel to Loneliness of the Free Wind, original category. See ya, this is interesting.
| Reviewed By: jade_pendant [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2005 23:34 CST
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oh please please update I want to know what happens so bad
| Reviewed By: stefini On: January 09, 2005 20:49 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow! i really like this story!! and im very picky about storys i read! someone nominated this story on the 'features fic forum' and i followed the link, im impressed! keep up the good work!
| Reviewed By: Kyonarai [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2005 19:11 CST
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well, I just read this last chapter for the third time...I can't wait for the next one. Shippo? A lecher? Good lord! BAD FOX! VERRY BAD FOX!
| Reviewed By: Kyonarai [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2004 18:53 CST
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When is the next chapter coming? *whines* sorry, I just love this story!
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