| "Bleeding Heart" Reviews/Comments [ 14 ] |
Title: Bleeding Heart
Reviewed By: Janie50989 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2004 23:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW!!!!GREAT STORY I REALLY LOVED IT.GREAT JOB.I HOPE YOU WRITE MORE STORIES LIKE THIS.WELL LATER.KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK.BYE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: hewo!
Reviewed By: DemonKirara00 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2004 15:46 CDT
Comment/Review:
checking my reviews!! ^_^ thanks to all you reviewer-people-thingies!
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Reviewed By: MichiruAOZ [MediaMiner Member] On: September 30, 2004 20:49 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was so sweet! I really ejoyed reading this story and look forward to reading more. ^.~
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Reviewed By: Inu Bullet (not logged in) On: September 04, 2004 20:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
BRAVO!!!! this must be the best fic without sexual intercourse involved that i have ever read! note that it is extremely rare for me to grade something as a "ten." next, make a lemon. P.S. man, am I the only straight guy who reads these things?
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Reviewed By: DemonKirara00 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2004 16:34 CDT
Comment/Review:
ooh...and another thing...RedHerring, thanks for all your ideas!! -runs off to change little things and add chapters- ^_^
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Title: Just Me Checkin' And Thankin'!
Reviewed By: DemonKirara00 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2004 16:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hey, just me! I'm checking my reviews, and I also wanted to thank you all the reviewed!!! ^_^
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2004 01:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
this is a great fanfic please update soon
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Title: Ch5 review
Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2004 18:34 CDT
Comment/Review:
Truthfully, I think the story went a bit too fast. I know they might have strong feelings for each other, but it is a little too soon for them to start declaring their love. Are you going to adress that later on? What about what made Inuyasha drift away from her in the first place? I think that it is, in part, a good thing. That way, they wren't too close before they got together. ////////////// I really do think that you should ease up on the japanese words in the chapter. When you write in one language, please stick to it. It may be nice to show off how much Japanese you know, but there is a time and a place to make your characters speak in another language; and I don't think that that time was in the story yet. ///////// You also don't have much in the way of setting. Descriptions may be boring to read, sometimes, but it can really further the mood of the story if you describe how the light shone like a holo around Inuyasha's hair. Or the way his shadow looked with his ears tweaking. I really think that it could further your writing ability too.////////////// I like the idea of spin the bottle. Kagome's loss of control was nice to read, and you described the kissing well. I hope to read more. Please continue, and good luck!! ^__^
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Reviewed By: Inuyasha_girl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2004 17:51 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ooops...sry about da last comment. i put red by mistake...lol. anyway, good chapters. please update sooooooooooooon....
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Reviewed By: Inuyasha_girl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2004 17:50 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
red
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Title: AWESOME
Reviewed By: Canehdian_chick On: August 28, 2004 00:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this story!! Keep up the great writing, and finish up the story :) or keep it going forever :O!! Then its like never-ending amusement! woo! lol Keep up the awesome work.. awesome characters... and actions.. good action .. hope to see more :P:)
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Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2004 12:41 CDT
Comment/Review:
Mediaminer is stupid alot of the time. It might have gotten rid of the first word of every paragraph. I've seen it happen before. Just try uploading again. ////////////// Anyway, I love the story. You've done a good job writing in first person, present tense, and that's not easy to do. My only suggestion is that you work a bit on discription. I know alot of author's usually skip descriptions of characters, or places if they're using settings from the manga. That's not a good idea, because you get in the habit of thinking that everyone knows what you're talking about. Everyone does, when you use characters that have an image already drawn for them, ut when you write something original, you're gonna have to describe them.//////////////// Anyway, great story. I look forward to reading more.
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Title: Well
Reviewed By: Demonicslayer [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2004 10:00 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well...I dunno if you meant it but, It seems like some words are missing in the sentences! You might wanna check it over! OTHER THAN THAT I LIKED IT! ^_^
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Title: I'm FIRST!!
Reviewed By: Demonicslayer [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2004 11:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY! I'm first to review! I loved it! Man the guy is a total jerk! I hope Kagome gets away and Inuyasha is there to comfert her! PLEASE UPDATE! As long as you update I'll review! ^_^
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